"Snatch the sun and wrap it in her arms" and my heart ached.

Hinamori just loved a man, that looked really good and kind, but she feel he was always out of reach, and after everything she still wants to have him.

Poor girl, but her selfless love is really beautiful.

Aw! This is so tragic and adorable. Very realistic also! Great job!

It's so depressing! D Poor Momo, man...I wanna bitch-slap Aizen, damn it.

Good job with the story though. Details were good, I could picture everything clearly. ]

Oh my...I adore your writing style. It flows and fits and is full to the brim with beautiful descriptions (my favourite being "features as delicate as an ink paiting"). This was perfectly in character for Momo, because I too see it as a stretch for such a delicate, young character to believe herself to be up to par with her own captain on the romantic front. I loved your use of Rangiku and Nanao and how they might be a better match for Aizen...it really seems like something Momo would consider instead of imagining herself with him, feelings and all.

Oh...That's so sad...But I really like it because of how well you described the emotion and setting. Very good.