Way too much reliance on cannon. With all the changes you made prior to cannon how is everything unfolding exactly the same. At this point it's just a cannon rehash with the added annoyance of not seeing any of the action take place, it's always described after the fact from the point of view of someone who wasn't even there.

Ok, so, they can keep Lily and Anwen safe, but not Ted? Really?

Not a review of the chapter per say but is Anwen Welsh or Irish? I've never heard Ma and Da used in wales for parent Mam and dad or tad yes.

So it is seeming like everyone is just forgetting about Eva. She was with Remus for a while and it seems odd that they aren't mentioning her at all. Plus it seems weird that they haven't looked into it. Still rather like the story so far.

im enjoying this series this is 2nd time to read thank you so much

Story just keeps getting better keep it up thanks

Now there is
- Eria (I think)
- Edmund/Eddie

You like E-Names
- Ewan
- Evan
- Ethan
- Emma

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I have to agree with the most recent reviewers. Your writing is very good and I want to continue reading, but Anwen has become unbearable and unlikeable. Some of the other characters should be better at something than she. Having her be the master of everything is too unrealistic and I get annoyed now when they all continue to fawn over her skills and accomplishments. Especially Sirius. How often and how many times must he say how much he loves her and how wonderful she is. It's really OTT and detracts from the plot. We readers should decide if she's wonderful or not by her actions and choices, and not because the other characters have to keep telling us. Plus she herself seems completely self-absorbed. Every occurrence quickly becomes about her. I also thought it was weird to fuss over Ginny's experience in the Chamber and Anwen's emotional response while completely ignoring the fact that Harry fought a Basilisk and nearly died from its venom. No matter how hard you try to make this Anwen's story, because you are following the canon plot, it's really still Harry's journey. Also...way, way too much crying.

My regard for Anwen has been spiraling downward for quite some time, but now I find her unbearable and unlikeable which is too bad considering the effort put into making us like her. Our esteem for any character should arise from that character's actions and choices and not because the writer makes the other characters tell us over and over again how wonderful she is. The way all the characters fawn over her and abdicate their power to her has finally resulted in making me start to dislike them too. It was a bad idea to make her the master of all skills rather than spread around the talent as would be natural. It makes the others seem weak and second-rate. This is disappointing since most of the readers were likely attracted to this story because we like the Marauders. Also...way, way too much crying. You show her as rather unstable and yet we are expected to accept that everyone depends on her expertise and judgement. She's dreadful.

Oh, dear. This story started out wonderfully and is extremely well written. It's very interesting. And yet, I do have something to complain about... I truly dislike Anwen now. I adored her at first, but now it just seems like she's very self-centered. Everything is about her and she's the big guns, yet a huge target all the same. I find she's been written as more and more self-absorbed as the story goes on. While I respect the idea of this and am absolutely in love with it, I fear my dislike for the OC has ruined it for me so I won't read this anymore. But I shall read other things by you! You're a fantastic writer. Don't stop :) especially don't get discouraged by one opinion.

Leglimens is getting Into minds and occlumens is keeping Leglimens out. It's reversed in this chapter.

Loved the story so far, but Anwen is getting on my nerves. Not only does she seem unnecessarily powerful, with all of her extra abilities, she also seems to be the smartest person around. I get that characters should have individual talents, but she is better at everything than everyone, and she can do everything no-one else can. She is very condescending and and extreme control freak, and doesn't like people doing things according to her plan. As much as she argues with Dumbledore about his manipulations she's well on her way to becoming him.

Like this situation in Godrics Hollow, she's on his case about being reckless, although he had a perfectly good reason for wanting to go and and he and Hermione made the best of a bad situation. She treats everyone like a child incapable of making their own decisions.

I started to read your stories a week ago and I honestly have to say I am very impressed of your writing skills and your imagination. I really enjoyed reading them :)
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