This was utterly incredible! I felt every emotion - their joy, love, anguish and sorrow. Your last couple of chapters had me weeping as if I'd lost my own child. What a gifted author you are! And so dedicated. Major kudos to you

Oh wow, this story was amazing! I really loved it right from the beginning: the plot, the characters -especially Tess and Tavingtonthey are such a lovely couple! The last few chapters made me cry. I was so sad, why so much tragedy, but life is like that... I felt with them when they were mourning the dead. I couldn't believe that the story might end like this, but then the epilogue made up for it. I feel happy for them to be reunited in death. I really love the last sentence you wrote to end this story!Anne

The ending was great ) Ok he is dead, but so its better than he is ll the time sad. (coudl cry again X) )

Thank you for the story :D In german their are just 5(?), just one is finished.

Q_Q I'm crying with him! How could you?! In all books my fav characters die or they are sad because their love died. T_T

I love your writing style )

I actually had to stop at this chapter because I know what happens next and it's just not a happy ending. Still, maybe an ending with closure. Just a side note- I would like to see Bordon hold off on Tess even more when it concerns the issue of her and Will being together. I know he's a forgiving sort at the end of the day, but that was a really deep blow, with a whole lot of shame involved. Maybe play that out more? And, maybe have Bordon reflect more on his relationship with Susanna, how they met and began their relationship. I think you have already brought that up, but again would be nice too.

I've really enjoyed reading this. :) Happy writing!

Yeesh, a slap just solves everything, hm? I have used it a fair bit with Will. There's just something about it. Also, poor Bordon! Understandable though. Tavington isn't one who is really a 'committal' sort of person. He's a little murky in that area. And, I'm sure Bordon has his hands tied with his loyalties as well. Good chap!

Ah yes, fresh, crazy love. So impulsive. Hehe! I feel terribly smug, knowing what's going to happen. Poor Geoffrey though. Bordon, never gets a break. At least he isn't too blind not to suspect something. A bit surprised that he let her dance with Will though. Then again, he is Bordon's superior officer; he probably didn't have much of a choice.

It's nice to see a tender moment with Will. Of course, that brash exterior is hiding just behind the corner, I suppose? He can't have let his guard down completely yet.

Nice chapter. One could almost lose themselves in the intimacy, but then, there's always that niggling little thought: Tavington is USING her. Shamelessly. Beast!

I like the little glimmer of unsureness that Tavington shows when Tess tells him she wants to recant on the deal. She did have the upper-hand even if it was but for a moment. Also, just a note about the ending, and it's something I myself need to work on too. You end with the words 'sarcastically' and 'simply' in the two last sentences respectively. It felt a little repetitive to me. Maybe end the last sentence with something like "... he answered her sarcasm with a blithe retort.'

Just a thought. Enjoying the read!

Typical 'use and loose' tactic for Tavington; of course, it will come back to haunt him. I believe you said you were going to rewrite this one; what plans do you have for it?

Such a polite ****. That's it... Tavington almost becomes 'human', and then... op, nope! Devilish rogue! Shame they didn't put more of it in the movie.

I liked this chapter; I like the way Tavington's anger was portrayed. It was definitely present, but it wasn't an inhuman anger. It didn't stereotype him.

The cruelty of his fellow soldiers... :(. I suppose they were 'doing their duty', but jeez!

I read this before, years ago. It's nice to take another look. Seems like fire is constantly surrounding the Dragoons.