J'ai adoré

Another wonderful part of the story :) im ready for part 3

FAN!

I don't mean to sound like a bitch but though I like your story, a good bit of it conflicts. In chapter four to convince Justin not to give up, Brian asks him to recall the time that he found out about his parents' divorce. But in chapter five Jennifer mentions having to go see a divorce lawyer, and Justin is confused and acts like he has no idea that his parents were considering divorce.

Also, in around chapter three, Jennifer is the only person in the room when Brian has his first seizure, and the doctor informs her that they are a side effect of the head injury. But in chapter five when he begins to have another seizure, the story says that no one informed her about the side effects that Brian would have.

And I'm really confused about Justin and his schooling. Is he a Junior in high school or a Senior? Because in chapter five Jennifer tells Justin not to worry, that he graduated and she has his diploma. But in the next paragraph questions are asked regarding whether Justin wants to continue his education at PIFA while finishing his last year. So I'm completely confused, and I was confused about this in the first story as well.

all over no fair dame

oh boy hows brian going to feel

wow kip ant a happy chappi

sweet

cool as

good one

this is so great

go justin

the last part was funny

amazing

i can't stop reading this is great