Sorry about this - that's the first thing I want to say. ...But... I'm just not comfortable reading about a sexual harassing Kirk. ESPECIALLY if they end up having some fucked up happy ending. My morals can't get behind that. Sorry. I'm out.

Give in already! XD (just had to say that...)

I am all for non-canon characters. Especially since the movie came out in 2009, it gave fanfic writers more of an ability to play with the characters without much concern for following all the rules built up over the years with the Star Trek series. But there is a line, and I am sorry to say you have jumped it.

I give you props for trying to add an OC character though. The biggest issue being that a lot of them tend to be a bit Mary Sue.

I'm not certain that Spock would know how to start a car ...I can't be certain but I don't think he would know. There wouldn't be a reason for him to know.

Looking forward to see where this goes.

Sbfc

gets worse with new chapters.

That...kept me entertained for about 3 hours straight (It is now 3:34 AM) and I felt compelled to let you know that I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Hope to read more of your works soon.

Bravo.

omg kirk fail! lol

it's cool how you've incorporated the tos into your story. although it's good all i can pictue are the new spock and kirk cuz the old kirk was ewwwy

kirk you jackass! how dare you sexually harass spock...although it's hawt lol

This is it.

I can't read anymore. It just keeps getting worse and worse.

I had hoped that it would get better once the actual story got started, but I was terribly disappointed.

First of all, what's supposed to be the "story"? I see no plot whatsoever in all this.

Second, you should at least watch the new movie once or twice more. Or at least understand it. All the crew is painfuly out of character: Uhura is an extremely intelligent, serious woman; how could you just make her into Jim's bed partner? Chekov is a genious, and while he's really weird sometimes, I just can't see him gossiping like a 10 year old girl; a person doesn't get to be the youngest-ensign-in-the-history-of-Starfleet just because. Sulu is too professional and Scotty is too in love with the Enterprise to be hanging around the bridge like that. McCoy is not above gossiping, but he certainly wouldn't do it like that! He's too serious and grouchy for that. And the worst part: Spock and Jim! Spock could take Jim ANY day; he might not be indestructible, but he's certainly not weak! And Jim? He's not an idiot, and while he gives the impression of being a playboy, he's also quite professional and good-hearted. This guy you write about would have gotten court-martialed, demoted and almost surely kicked out of Starfleet in less than a week.

Then there's another thing... what's with you and Spock's ears? They may be pointed, but they're still just ears! Grab yours and see what it does to you.

If you really want to write fiction, there are plenty of guides out there in the internet that can help you write something palatable.

*~I had been a vegan, but out of politeness, I still ate the vegetables.~*

*~She ate the veggies out of the meal and politely declined the meat.~*

you know... that first one makes it seem a little confusing... sounds like vegans don't eat vegetables.

Hmm. I think I enjoyed reading this. Diffidently not my favorite, but not bad at all.

~Fern Rose

I think that you are dragging this out way too much! I want something to happen!

omg love it!

I loved your story! Thank you for taking the time to write this.

It's all cool.

Even thou there there was no sex, I can live.

I enjoyed reading this story. It didn't take it self to seriously, I liked that.