Cool :)

i think its REALLY good!

Oh, this a piece of one tasty cake D Yummy!

To answer your question at the end: Of course you should make more! Hrm ... okay...

Best Wishes, Alaythassa

I enjoyed this fanfic,considering that good and that i really love these job!

Very nicely written. If you ask, "Should I write more?" I would say, "Yes, yes you definitely should."

This story is clever. :D

Please keep writing.

I liked it, it was hot! and the the way that you said that they danced together made it even more hot and sexy...and then they kissed which was awesome I wish they would kiss on the tv series already! anyway it was awesome...

hahahahaha! that was more funny than passionate if you ask me! (that might have been an insult, but i think that's good). the oneshots with too much fluff and lemon just make a really awkward read because they just have the fluff and lemon, but no story line.

please make more, i adore them

Aww, i really liked this story

I think Youruichi and Kisuke are a cute couple!

You should make another chapter ;]

~RarusuRinnu1310~

I'M IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY! They are the perfect couple, and I would KILL to dance with Kisuke! I need to write some more of my stories, and you gave me a perfect inspiration to do it. I may be rambling, but this ROCKS! You're an amazing writer. I'm done now...

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( 3) -hairy monkey

This was really good. It was very well written in description. The emotions was nicely put and it was great how much the explanation between the two. There were some things that need to be explained though. Why do they rival against each other? Why do they think that they shouldn't date at first but later on they approved as a couple? Was it because she was royalty and he was a fellow commoner?

That aside, I liked the kissing at the bar scene and the dance was very small but otherwise nicely written. It was cute. I love this pairing. It's the best.

Well, cya around then.

PS: Seeing how it's a one shot, are you going to make a different story but something similar to this one or this one-shot will turn into a long series of events?

Hey! I got your PM, and I'm sorry I'm a little late at reading this. School, I tell ya. Haha

For your first Bleach story, it was pretty good.

At first it seemed sort of too factual, but I saw you were trying to lay out the story.

So that was pretty good. :D

Haha The chemistry between Yoruichi and Kisuke is funny. I loved it!

Good story, I must say. Nice job.

This is a good start. But I'm going to be honest. It may need a little more detail. Try to draw the reader into the story by describing the atmosphere and the emotions of the characters.

However, I really like the idea. I'm interested to see what you decide to do with this.

Very good! I enjoyed reading them in a formal atmosphere, especially when they're in such a playful mood and getting along for once!

Overall, I like the idea of them playing such a joke on their friends and then realizing that they actually have feelings for each other. It's got a good solid base to it. The one thing that I do notice however, is that it lacks a lot of detail in places. Portions of it seem to move very fast, and have almost a "this happened, then this happened, then this happened" without much explanation, which makes the overall fic feel rather rushed. Which is a shame. I think you could improve on it by taking a moment to slow down and add a bit more description to things. You could also try using longer, more complex sentances. For instance, rather than "She did this. She was also really good and they liked her" try something like "In addition to the things that she did, she was a very good person and well-liked because of it". It flows a bit better, and doesn't seem as choppy. Overall, it was very cute to read and I enjoyed it. I hope my review is helpful to you. _