This story is woefully under-reviewed!

I gotta say, it's been a while since I really read any DBZ fanfiction (and when I say a while, I mean 4 or 5 years at least!), but for some reason I decided to skim what FFN had to offer and I found this...

What a gem! Unique in plot, decidedly well-written (a rarity on FFN, I assure you), wrought with intrigue and a grippingly intense emotion.. Oh and your depiction of the characters - it makes me giddy! I must say your portrayal of Chichi is one of the best I've read: certainly motherly, protective, and overbearing, but held together with a strength fitting of the Ox King's daughter. :)

And dear lord, I did NOT see this plot twist coming! Kudos, sir. Kudos to you. I only have one question now: do you plan on updating soon? :D

I didn't really get into this story at first because it started off so slow, now however the story is really picking up and I can't wait to see what happens. Are you going to have gohan fight a real villain or just more of these monsters. If so I would love to see gohan/piccolo/vegeta fight back-back that would be amazing.

NOOOOOO! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT ! I HAS TO READ MORE! KEEP WRITING, KEEP WRITING! :OOOOOOO

great chapter, keep up the good work

great chapter

Could go either way ... Irons tends to lean to being evil so its hard to say what exactly he is doing. I was thinking that something was going to happen to Grace, cause in away Gohan and her are connected, I think just not in the way as Gohan and his mom. It was interesting, hope you update soon.

WOW! That was awesome! GREAT JOB! I love this STORY! KEEP ON WRITTING!

Ah, I can't believe you ended it like that! Loved this chapter, loved the intereaction between Grace, Eric and Piccolo. Liked how Piccolo got Vegeta to help. The 'You owe him'. Loved the ending though I am bummed at the way it ended. Hope you continue!

Liked the switch in personality on Irons. I wish he interacted more, I feel like he hasn't had much of a part since the first chapter. Shorter chapter :(, I love your long chapters, I get more out of them, but this was still an interesting chapter. About the Shruti, if they where always there then I would have thought that King Kai might have mentioned it or something. And it's public knowlegde, more or less that Gohan and ChiChi are missing, wouldn't the Z fighters know? And wouldn't they be lookig into it?

Great chapter! Best I think! I caught a few mispronounced sentences, you had it worded ... had an extra word so it didn't quite make sence. But other then that I enjoyed this chapter, The part where Grace went to Gohan's, met the tutor and to Ruby (I can't stand that name though. It reminds me of Ruby from Supernatural. And I couldn't stand her) and Gohan's talk. Though your Ruby is different and I like her character, it's just the name that irritates me.

Loved the ending. Liked how Grace thought through things then actually looked up info. I thought the article containing info about thier disapearance was well done. It was very interesting.

Liked this chapter, better then the last. Liked how you put Chichi's point of view.

Interesting. Though I enjoyed the first chapter more. But we have mystery ... I wonder how those creaters could have grabbed Gohan's mom without him hearing/noticing anything?

It was funny. Different, I haven't come accross something like this at all. Loved how you portrayed Irons. I just loved it! It was very interesting.

Absolutely amazing! Great job with the fight scenes too! Keep it coming!