This story is a dirty lie!

too little too late Naruto you lost your chance

LOL. Shiniobi with a bed time.

Jus so yer kno, for the plural of buts, it's written like that, -buts. The rule I remember it by is that pluralisation can never be done by an apostrophe. Also, I found the rest of the chapter pretty entertaining, but I think there's some stuff you left out. I think we all know that that's how he'd react if these events were to happen, but I think you should also mention how he feels. I think that he'd be feeling a whole lot of rage and anger, but also a little confusion as to why he feels so strongly about something like this happening to Hinata. He guesses that maybe it's because they're friends, but he's also pretty sure that he wouldn't get this angry if someone tried to pull the same shit with Ino.

That nightmare scene was so cute. And the 'staying in bed dilemma' as well. That would've made for an interesting morning the next chapter.

I like how you've written both of them. They've really stayed in character.

Jus so yer kno, the right one would be steam. Mist is natural, and smoke would mean he burnt it. Also, just try your hand at writing a lemon. We all suck at first. It's the only way you'll get better. LOL.

I like this story. Their floundering is so cute. And Naruto is still so dense. LOL

Very cute ...O hoped in the end Naruto tell Sakura to shut up and go Fuck herself. ...she deserves it for what she say

Wow Naruto you pervert. .just kidding I like it that he thought about Hinata when he did that

I liked the story very Hinata and Naruto have sex in this story?

Lovely story! I enjoyed every word of it :)

Nice!

I love this idea!

I just wish there's more, though :D

I really love this story

OMG I COMPLETELY LOVED IT! ONE OF MY FAV FANFICTIONS!