| Reviews for Fourth Quarter |
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  Guest chapter 3 . 6/19 Rose and Emmett? |
 valentina.delafuente chapter 31 . 8/11/2019 Que hermosa historia |
| Guest chapter 31 . 7/28/2019 Amazing story! |
| greenyboost chapter 1 . 7/21/2019 I don't like the formatting style. you should try aligning the lines at center. This format just ia not really a comfortable style to read |
| LolaTheSa chapter 26 . 1/7/2019 NO, CHARLIE IS A COMPLETE AND UTTER FUCK! The FACT Bella still is so hung over him AFTER HE RUINED HER RELATIONSHIP WITH EDWARD AND WHICH STEAM ROLLED INTO HER LOSING HER CHILD! HE IS NOT HER FATHER! I will not read on cause I refuse to believe this. |
| LolaTheSa chapter 25 . 1/7/2019 Honestly, CHARLIE CAUSED THIS PAIN IN THEIR RELATIONSHIP! WHY are they still up in her arms with each other when THEIR BREAK UP WAS FUCKING PLANNED BY OTHER FUCKING PEOPLE! |
| LolaTheSa chapter 24 . 1/7/2019 HER 'DAD' RUINED THEIR RELATIONSHIP ON PURPOSE! WHAT THE FUCK! THEY SHOULD WANT TO TAKE LEGAL ACTION! INCLUDING BELLA! I'm sorry, but this just turned in a unbelievable way... She shouldn't even be with Jacob, and she shouldn't even be questioning being with Edward. AND SHE SHOULD NOT BE CALLING CHARLIE DAD! |
| Guest chapter 31 . 7/22/2018 Oh my goodness, what a great fic! I loveeeee how it gives us a detailed story in their youth and then another as adults. Really great fic! Thank you! |
| Lulutbo chapter 31 . 4/15/2018 I have loved this story! I’m sorry to reach the end...I just wish it would go on and on |
| Guest chapter 31 . 11/1/2017 I loved it! fantastic job! |
| timidvampire chapter 30 . 7/4/2016 loved this. Not sure I would have forgiven Charlie like they did, but fab story x |
| Liz113 chapter 30 . 4/1/2016 Could not put down! This story is great! |
| CafeMoCha chapter 30 . 1/3/2016 "Paradise" by Judith McNaught - one of my all-time favorites. I'm glad you like it so much so as to write an entire Twilight fanfiction about it. But as much as I love some of your original deviations, such as their high-school romance, I must mention this: has a beta-reader talked to you about over-use of ellipses (...)? In lots of places, some other punctuation (even a period) would have been much more appropriate. You see, an ellipsis is a sign of an unseasoned writer. During internal dialogue, we do have pauses or perhaps a buildup to a well-written line. But the more ellipses you use, the less impact they have, until after a point, they're simply a distraction... an annoyance. I hope you take this criticism into consideration and with good faith. You could truly up the ante on your writing if you explore the whole world of punctuation the English language thoughtfully provides. A little effort goes a long way. Having said that... thank you for this novel NFL iteration of a well-beloved book! |
| Anonymous1511 chapter 2 . 11/21/2015 Sorry about my previous review, I posted it accidentally before completing it. Like I said, Awesome 1st chapter, but the changes in appearance is a problem because it causes us to detract from the story. You see, when we read we create a picture in our head, and when I read this, instead of Edward I imagine a Jacob - like person. I hope you can see how it becomes pretty disturbing. So despite your statement, it does take our minds away from the story. So if you can, please consider this fact. Thanks! |
| Anonymous1511 chapter 1 . 11/21/2015 Awesome 1st chapter. But the changes in the character appearance is pretty disturbing. And it |
