I like you make a sequel like what happens afterwards.

idk y but i can picture ash standing on the edge of a balcony, dawn walking in & seeing him, he starts falling just before dawn gets to him with "Sound of Silence" playing in the background

Shit! Never saw that coming

fucking gay lol

I like turtles...

This has to be one of the most depressing fanfics I have ever read. However, it's not a bad thing, it was actually a really good thing in this story, it added a lot to it. Keep it up!

This was depressing as ****! :'(

I really don't know... Maybe, just maybe you could write us an alternate ending? I know it will ruin the Angst genre but it would be really nice touch. But overall, the story was really good. :)

aww :( That was so sad. But I still enjoyed it!

Keep up the awesome work!

this was so sad! but i loved it! the plot was good and the flashbacks really drew me in. keep writing!

you did very well but it would be awesome to add more and have twist and turns

MNNMPHF i like angst stories!

I don't want to sound sick, but I'm an advancedshipper. :P

Really nice story. A couple of grammar problems, but you did good. It's always sad when I see Ash commit suicide (The real Ash would never do that), but you pulled it off well.

One thumb up to you.

This is a pretty good story, the flashbacks give some character depth and help along with the storyline. However just as some constructive critisism the scene where ash takes the razor to his wrists, you could have gone into some more detail about his thoughts and feelings. As it is the reason Ash ends up in hospital, and because it is a suicide attempt the story would be very powerful if more detail and depth had been used.

But as it stands it is a good story :)