The puppet IS sasori

Sad...

Well I look forward to the rewrite

I know its war and people die. but Stop killing them. Its kind of depressing

While I like the story this chapter was very erratic and I had a hard time keeping straight what was "Now" and what was the "Past"

I just read on Spanish wikipedia that Nii and Shii (one of tsuchikages guards) are twins... I'm shocked

Well Cheers. As for suggestions I believe you need to cut out several of the first couple chapters. they could have been easily shortened. The interaction with Akatsuki were excellent. Also the first 'meeting' between Yugito and naruto as they escaped was quite nice.

Personally I liked the stoyr even though it was a bit dry and not very meaty.

Some parts lacked description making it a incessent ball of actions. But at other times it had amazing, small, descriptions that made my skin tingle.

Your world is very interesting It could be fleshsed out more.

One of the best War stories written. I wish it was more lengthy because it needs that. On the other hand... Its amazing.

Great story! Can't wait for the update!

Good luck on the rewrite.

You think, your stoy is bad?

I dont feel so, but its your project.

I wish you success with the rewriting

Well for one the story was all over the place with little back story thrown in everywhere and no flash back sequences just flashbacks. Also I want them to idk get together sooner or something and maybe some heated lemon in the middle of a battle hormones and chakras flying then the jus go there seperate way and back to fighting after. Also make naruto join kumo or something if hes gonna be a traitor cause i figure thats where you were going with this right? Traitor of the highest degree would be switching sides. Also more itachi explain where he is im pretty sure he was dead but i was so confused lol. Still loved story was sad when i saw and update email with not chapter. Good Luck in writing this again.

Just one thing, keep up this story until you catch up with the rewrite. Always annoys me when people take down stories, especially ones that I've been enjoying. So until you catch up keep it up.

I look forward to it.

A rewrite can only benefit this story.

It's not bad, but it could be so much better.