i think five...
hikaru,lantis,umi,fuu - 1st verse
sakuya - 2nd AU
cold umi, eagle,hikaru,clef- 3rd AU
hikaru's son - 4rt AU
fuu - 5ft AU

nice chapter

I am confused. ONE or two are two people with the same name?
And Eagle is against Cephiro. But I thought he had died?
Excellent chapter.

a journey through time.
Lantis on Earth. In Tokyo.
Great!

I love Mokona!
nice chapter

nice chapter

Hey there! 3-day reader, first time commenter.

Hats off to your continuing this story even after it seemed it'd lost all hope for a continuation. I cannot believe you have had this on for almost as long as I've even been *aware* of the existence of fanfic, and yet decided to keep it going as late as 15 years later. I commend you on that.

While over the years I've grown fond of Fuu as a versatile character in MKR fanfic-dom, I found it pretty smart how you kept her off the action until the right moment. Although I would've pictured Umi being sent overseas by her parents rather than Fuu, you skilfully avoided the pitfall of having just one or two Magic Knight go through the cool adventures while the other(s) just stood by illogically. A lot of fics seem unable to sort this out, so to see your story dispense with it almost from the get-go felt refreshing. I do hope - and the latter chapters renew this hope - that you get her to do more story-wise.

I rarely get to see a fanfiction author get ahold of their preferred Knight, write their entire story around her, and make it feel essential. You've done all of this with Hikaru by using the deceptively easy approach of having her and Lantis meet on Earth - seriously, this gets botched on so many other fics, even good ones - and see how she reacts to this. The newfound agency she gains - and did she even get in some sarcastic jabs with Umi or did I imagine that? - feels so different, and at the time so natural and refreshing for her character. MKR the series proper got a lot of mileage out of her being and eventually relinquishing the new pillar of Cephiro but rarely did much with her role as the de facto leader of the Knights. How she will have to face her family now that they know about her and Lantis, and the feelings she has to confront now that her beloved has shown interest in her sexually, draws me into the story's continuation in a way all the talk about alternate universes does not. Kudos for that.

More than any other aspect of your story, the stinger at the end of the first chapter with "Umi" and our would-be villain, in my opinion, cracks open your story in a positive manner. It sends your story on a path threading between the "Now" plot and subplots and the "Then" or "Alternate" plot(s?) and, why not, at times it seems that it will all sag and collapse under its own weight - more on that in a moment - but your focus on characters and how their relationships bring the most out of each other compels me to see how the alternate universes and versions of said characters will ultimately square off each other. Showing us, say, how Hikaru and Umi interact during the coffee incident went a long way to showing, not telling, the depth of their bond and what could disappear if the antagonists get away with their goals.

I will hazard a guess here and say that you got the idea of going Cosmic - as in strongly implying the other universes and characters will eventually interact with each other - after you returned from hiatus, and I say, what a great choice. Now that you established how the Magic Knights feel about each other and how Lantis and Hikaru's brothers also see each other, you do well to use the rest of your story to bring all of these elements together in ways that will strengthen the drama at its core. Do it wisely.

Now, the flipside to having so many moving parts and dishes spinning... this may be only me, but 20 episodes in and I don't see the question of how many Cephiro's exist bears on the lives of the characters we've spent most of story with so far. Originally it nagged me up until chapter 15-ish that "Umi" had not yet integrated herself fully into the plot besides the role she has played in Sakaya's past. But then I realized what I saw as a problem with "Umi" actually affected other elements not belonging to the "Now" plot (Hikaru and Umi in Tokyo, Lantis and Hikaru's brothers living together, Fuu overseas) - they haven't organically become a threat to the story you as the writer have asked us to invest ourselves more emotionally into. Sakaya has come the closest to acting as such, actually having the closest thing to an opportunity to wreak havoc on the protagonists. The fact that you slow-burned that moment, introducing it 10 chapters into Cross and right after a massive revelation about his lineage, made it all the stronger. In my opinion, it came a little too late, but you pulled it off otherwise. I wish I looked forward to whether you have similar introductions for "Eagle" or other antagonists - especially now that the Knights have regained (some of?) their abilities - but I feel as if my expectations would collide with the story you actually want to tell. In other words, I don't want The Story I Want To Read to warp my perception and muddle the genuinely great aspects from The Story You're Actually Telling. You've done excellent work illustrating the stakes of the ultimate conflict between the Magic Knights and the antagonists from the Organization thus you've earned the right to take this story as far as you go. I only hope you don't let the Cosmic aspect of it get too far from the human core.

I don't mean any of this as a knock on Cross. No one reads 60,000 words of anything just to up and decide it sucks. In fact, you are one of the very, very few fanfiction writers (I count them in one hand's fingers, including you) who understand that making a story "serious" does not equal making it "deep." The coffee incident, Sakaya eating at a McDonald's (that part literally made me guffaw), Umi's father and his interactions with others... what on the surface only seem like light moments actually show how you understand that having people behave like people and do people things invests readers into your story more than having two lovers wax poetry about their feelings or mages repeat what could happen to their worlds if great powers fell on the wrong hands ever would. As much as those cliches keep getting trotted out, not only in fanfic but in stories in general, because they're cliches and they work, you show also that the lighter side of life adds more weight to future conflicts. When it's not just some made-up characters on a page but characters who react and behave like people the readers know, the conflict transcends words and images to gain Importance. That, I daresay, is worth 60,000 words of text and 14 years of work, and maybe another additional 60,000 words and 14 years, who knows.

Keep writing!

My reaction to the beginning: Okay so far so good.
My reaction to the end: WHAT?! I'm so reading the other chapters NOW! - Read ya Later ;)

Well, finally i get here! Sorry for taking so long to read your update.
I like your paralel universe tesis. And Eagle's inner dialogue at the end was so good! Like the idea of Lantis playing different roles with every situation.
But what is he going to do now? Where are the girls?
I loved the words "Lantis is telling me the same thing" so cute!
Keep writing!

I just found this little gem! and all I have go say is that you have to continue it! Pretty please? It is such an amazingly written story, with and interesting plot! I just spent the last couple of hours reading through this whole thing even though I have classes tomorrow!

I love this story! I can't wait to read what happens next.

Hi there..
well, i will translate first as you requested in your Author's notes : "Hello! You have very good ideas, i have to say, hehehe, i congratulate you for trying to finish your history and ill be waiting" (the general idea..i'm not so good translating)
i finished 16 chaps, and the result: very good history, love the way you develop of the characters, specially Lantis. I loved this chap! A Lantis trying to protect Hikaru from her bros! Oh! i imagine every little piece!
Have to mention, i liked the addition of Nova! (she has a lot of potential! that's because i am not fan of the manga. That chapter when Nova kissed Lantis! GOLD!)
i have to confess: I was a little.. disagree about Hikaru's behaivor when she saw Lantis after two years, and Umi's as well. Don't know if i lost in traslation, but she seem so calm, so "ok, you are here". But maybe this feeling is generated because of my own histories (i like to keep complicated reunions between those two)
but after all, can't be angry with the Hikaru&Lantis scenes...i was dreaming something like this since...1997? hahaha, you caught my attention! (now i'm blushing here)
So good you're back, otherwise, i didn't notice your story. Please! finish what you start!. I bet these days were like "the day is shining and i see rainbows everywhere" since you updated and the reviews were comming. i know the feeling.
Congrats, and like your other follower was saying..i'll be waiting!

Whattt!
NO WAY.. Lantis defeated? NO f# way!
Next...

Ok, this is really good!
I'm liking this story,
Portals!
I loved reading a Lantis Mokona angry with the truth ... I never thought that my tall swordsman could be so bitter with the little fur ball.
My apologies if you find grammatical errors in my reviews, I'm not that good communicating

Me encanto el capitulo espero tu proxima actualizacion!