Lol, I didn't expect it to be Kiba, I thought it was going to be Naruto. Good job on the story!

Haha, brilliant. Nice work on this. Keep at it.

hahahaha.. this is hilarious~! :P

though, i've gotta admit it was pretty confusing when it came to the dialogues.. :P

going to continue this?

this is cute! though, if i must mention, Gaara's younger than temari. she's the oldest, then kankuro then gaara

DarkC

Quite funny and sweet. A lovely short story about Shikamaru and Temari. You did a great job. But I think there is an error in your story. It's nothing major, it's just because you have written that Gaara is the older brother which he isn't. However, is that because you want this story to be more dramatic and funny by writing that he is?

Anyway it's very good and I like it very much. Super good work(v)

I loved it. Cute and dainty, something that's nice to find in Fanfiction. I'd love more of course but this is enough (for now) :P

Keep up the great work!

Sand-Jounin-Temari

Kind of funny.

loved this story so much i had to review. usually i don't like short stories but this was brilliant!:D

really funny, and great plot!

would love more shikatema like this plz!