First of all, having that line about innocence was so unnecessary, and it wasnt funny... You could have left it by italicizing the know, end of story. Besides for that, great characterization of Luffy and Nami. Though, the pacing did seem a little awkward. Good job though.

Hahahaha Luffy est tellement mignon ! Du coup il y aura un petit Luffy , Nami qui va courir sur le bateau héhéhé

This was very funny. Your story was also very interesting about the way you write. Loved. Good job.

I think the idea is very cute

Only issue I have is with your bounties for them, I'd really expect more. And really I think Brooke had 88 when he first joined the crew.

Sorry if that info wasn't entirely out when you wrote this. But yeah. Still a very good one-shot.

you cant cook a martini mate you make one

I laugh so hard at the word 'condo' Lol.

Luffy's such an idiot but that's why we love him! ;P

OMG

HILARIOUS

wow...

slow...idoidic...confused...

that's luffy for ya

i loved this story!

Well, I'm not exactly one to support extramarital sex, but for humor's sake, I think you did pretty well. This is definitely something I could see Luffy doing. Well, actually, seeing how Luffy has not shown any real interest in girls ths far, it's questionable if he even cares about sex, but I guess that's not the point of this story.

Sincerely,

MasterofHearts1313

I like it. I really enjoy when someone can capture Luffy's innocence in a story. Very well done as well.

Personally, I was never a LuNa fan, but after reading this, I think I may just become one ;)

How adorably cute, and extremely enjoyable. I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Keep up the great work!

-Wikki

actually there are drinks with orange peels for garnish.. bit that was so cute hehe and you gotta love how innocent luffy is

LOLs, so they were planning to have sex, but than.. Luffy bought Tampons instead of condoms.. -.-/ LOLs!

very cute!

Oh my! I loved this story! So funny!

"Yes, Luffy, we can have sex now."

So cute!

Keep up the good work!