LOL! Nawww poor Hiruma, you should make a sequel and have Hiruma try kiss Sena again X3

Hope to read more of your works soon

Shika XD

two thumbs up! ahahahahahah so funny!

poor hiruma~ he doesn't get what he want~ fufufu

poor Hiruma XD

Awh...this fic is great! And it was really nice to read too!

*stares at cardboard shield. Extents finger. Pokes it*

Ishimaru... how did HIRUMA miss that? *pokes cardboard shield with butt of Hiruma's gun*(_)

-hey yall of to read

kekekeke poor hiruma! lolz

That's pretty funny and cute.

Poor Ishimaru.

AHAHAHAHAH! *lmao*

AHa-Ah..*cough* Oh, my...

I can't say anything..*laugh*

I mean...great one...plz write more...!

XD I like this a whole better, Hiruma can't win all the time! That's so funny, expect - excuse me, I'm kind of naggy tonight - "cried, caled, asked, clarified, huffed, apologized, chattered, explained, commented, pointed out," are all great replacements for 'said' ...but in moderation! Yeah, I might not be the best person to preach but, it's okay to just say said. We can probably guess from words before the sentence, and in, how someone says something. I don't have to say 'exclaimed' to prove my point in the sentence:

Humming to himself Sena turned startled when he noticed Hiruma walking up. "What's wrong with you?" Hiruma asked, raising an eyebrow.

"O-oh nothing. You just surprised me that's all!" Sena said, sighing in relief.

Sure, I did say ask once, but that's just a given since it's a question. The sentence could have been really annoying if it had read:

"What's wrong with you?" Hiruma investigated.

"O-oh nothing you just surprised me that's all!" Sena exclaimed.

Do you know where I'm going with this? I hope so. The story was still funny though, didn't see it turning out like that.

Oh my god! I can't breathe I'm laughing so hard. Poor Hiruma, he can't notice everything can he? So was the Ishimarus first kiss...?