I’m so confused what the fuck is happening

Awesome story!

This switching back and forth from past to present tenses is brutal. I'm having trouble making it past the first few paragraphs.

This fanfic .
Caught my attention a lot.
I have been impressed by the plot and the way you twisted things .
I was happy at the scenes lelouch/zero shared with kallen .
But the roof scene broke my heart .
I was very very sad and depressed at this !
I was very angered and frustrated by that scene , I even insulted my dad on a fit of rage !
This made me even cry. I got so mad when Lelouch watched that clip on his knightmare and shot down the screen.
But I felt relief when Charles explained koji's Geass .
Even more relief when Lelouch explained go kallen that Koji's geass influenced her to imagine the sex on the roof scene .
You then releved me of the anger when you made the chapter 16.
In the chapter 16 ,you explained that it was koji's Geass that made kallen imagine the sex scene and made Lelouch saw the video in his knightmare .

You casued me quite some pain ,so
Please answer these questions of mine
the video Koji showed Lelouch fake ?
You did mention something about Koji having bad video editing skills .

did Lelouch confirm hat the sex scene on the roof was koji's Geass effect ?
Since he saw a video of it twice ,how could he have figured it out

Please ,answer my questions in number order . Use numbers for labelling the answers respective to the questions I asked you

The depth of OOC in this fic is so immense, I'm not sure whether to see this as a crack!fic or an incredibly failed attempt at writing a serious fanfic...

You just ruined your story, bye.

Yeah Lulu, don't want to be both a sex offender /and/ a terrorist... That's just too much bad for one person.

This story is awesome.

I like pervy Lelouch... Really enjoying this story!

Great story! I really did enjoy it and your style of writing is a pleasure to read! Though, I hope you do someday add in an extra chapter because I really do want to see what happens in their married and family life as Emperor and Empress ;)

oh, and i meant 'red-haired son, and/or purple-eyed daughter' (not blue-eyed son as i previously wrote)

and yeah, that bastard fool of a Koji just had to DIE!

maybe you should have even given him a very very nasty death, but anyhow, HE IS DEAD!

i loved how you ended it, with Lelouch making sure that Kallen knew he was Zero and to confirm that to her that what happened on the roof was not real, since she was not just visibly shaken by it, but she knew something was wrong, that it wasn't her Knight, that it was outta place, not the man she loved, so that was awesome that you made sure he came fully clean, and the 'her smile was weak, but true', that was so powerful and as she reconciled both her prince and knight, that love was complete

kudos!

and that she becomes the empress, and now wants a baby, thank you for that, it's the best ending to this, given that you didn't give us red-haired son, and/or a blue-eyed son, i think we'll settle for her need, and definitely he'll provide!

PERFECTO!

Lelouch X Kallen KaLulu forever

this was a great beginning, but i only have one concern, why did you make Kallen have to strip all the way to her underwear? that wasn't cool man, i think Zero should have noticed her discomfort, i mean, nothing escapes him anyhow, and made a sort of turn-around that would have preserved her in some way...

anyhow, i still love it, and definitely, forever kalulu

i'm looking forward to it as you make their relationship stronger and their bond unbreakable, both as he is Lelouch and Zero

I've read your entire fanfic, and I must say, your story is hard to follow.

For instance, you cite C.C.'s memory loss as a known fact by Kallen, but this doesn't occur until Season 2, where Kallen already knows who Lelouch is. So, it is hard to understand when the story starts, and what events from the original overlap.

Another thing I'm not able to follow is how Kallen was still able to function in society after being discovered. Granted, this is for a short time period, but Kallen's face would have been all over the news, especially after being involved in the death of the queen.

You also make minor spelling and grammatical errors. These are few and far between, and easy enough to overlook. You should also remove the preview chapter, either shortly before or immediately after posting the full chapter.

Characterization is poor. Lelouch doesn't act like Lelouch. Kallen doesn't act like Kallen. Conflicts are resolved far too quickly. Koji is also very poorly done. To elaborate, Koji's Geass is the ability to manipulate all five senses. However, he would have to be genius-level to utilize this ability to the extent you show him. To make someone see something or someone is one thing. To make them hear something is another. To match these two, and have the image they see have it's mouth move, and add emotion, volume, and tone into the voice and expressions, along with gestures from the image... that's complicated, but doable. Touch can be simple, or complex. Touching a hand, sure? Simulating sex? Even without sound or sight, this is hard. Trying to simulate a person's body weight, and how they distribute it, over someone, with the addition of simulating movement? Add back in sight and sound, and you are nearing the impossible. But then to add smell and taste, such as smelling hair, or kissing during the act? Koji would have to be a genius to apply his ability in such as way.

Speaking of which, how did Koji know what Lelouch smelled or tasted like? Touched like? The only way he could know this is if he himself engaged in some level of sexual activity with Lelouch.

I'm sorry if this seems overly harsh. I think your story idea has lots of potential. But you need to take the time to flesh out your ideas further, describe scenes in more in-depth, and ask yourself is this something this character would do? How would they react to that?

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