Reviews for My Big Brother |
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Guest chapter 15 . 6/10 LAMEST STORY EVER! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO |
vampirelady13 chapter 9 . 1/27/2016 I understand that Daniel was her friend but to chock Jasper like she did. Is not something a mate would do. This is my opinion. Mates do not put other people first. She could of told them without hurting Jasper. This is the first chapter in the story that i am disappointed in. |
Guest chapter 20 . 6/4/2014 This was awesome! |
Guest chapter 2 . 5/4/2014 Jasper, duh! Edward is kind of a bitch |
Guest chapter 15 . 2/11/2014 Hehdbhdbdbbqjhbjbshh bih |
SAYAx13 chapter 2 . 1/21/2014 i think you should of made her into a human vamp drinker like peter nd char like a real Whitlock not a animal muncher ughh lol ... |
Ddskgdkgdhgdksk chapter 5 . 3/31/2013 Awww... so CUTE Love it :D :* |
Ddskgdkgdhgdksk chapter 2 . 3/31/2013 Jasper nd de song is beautiful |
VampWitchCat chapter 1 . 3/12/2013 So, I have read a few chapters into your story and I think the idea for it is great. It could be very interesting. However, I think your writing needs to develop a bit more. Also, the grammar mistakes were distracting. If you haven't already, I suggest getting a beta look over what you have written. From what I've read so far this story could go great places with a little editing. I wish you the best of luck with your future projects! |
Girloveshugs chapter 18 . 2/28/2013 great story, hope there is a sequel |
Dark chapter 4 . 9/23/2012 I did like this story at first but this chapter went way to fast but thats my opinion |
Melly2014 chapter 1 . 7/19/2012 Love this story! |
Steph A15 chapter 1 . 7/17/2012 I'm so excited to read this story!ยก! It sounds awesome. |
SomeoneQuiteTall chapter 1 . 6/28/2012 I understand that the main characters in the beginning of this story are Bella and Emmett but if this is a Bella/Jasper story, why are they not listed as character A & B? I love this story by the way |
Peta chapter 4 . 4/15/2012 I was reading your story but only got up to this chapter. I think you plot is a good one, but I find that your grammar requires work. Proper nouns (peoples names) should ALWAYS have a capital letter. You switch from them having one to not having one and I find that inconsistency makes it hard to read a story. |