""Come on, Shinobu." Naru cooed. "He'll be back. He just needs to see that he was wrong about this and when he does, everything will be back to normal.""

Mmm Naru's female arrogance and ego really is something. It's sad and pathetic really. That again all women are sad little things. Fucking sows.

Man why have you stopped updating the chapter. It's so ridiculously fucking awesome. It's not even canon, and I mean it in the brightest way possible. I was left speechless when I finished the last chapter, but it saddens me that you didn't complete this fascinating and mesmerizing story. I really really hope that you do write soon. I don't know about others but I am so impatiently waiting for the next chapters to come.

Must have more asap. Love it so far, keep it up. Can't wait to see what happens next.

had potential. But the dialogue is awful.

This chapter should have been called "The Death of a Promise".

Sad but interesting story. Naru's a bitch.

Don't like it

There is no pay-off in this story! Just a load of filler that makes no sense!

This fic exaggerates shit a bit, but in this reality, i'm surprised keitaro didn't just outright kill himself. LOL

although naru is nowhere that psychotic in canon..

my heart goes out to that poor masochistic bastard

Aggh! Damn dead fic. Went to hell after the OCs kidnapped the plot.

I'm loving this. I find myself constantly rephrasing your words but the scene- and storybuilding more than makes up for any grammatical slip-ups.
With so little decent Love Hina fanfiction out there i genuinely applaud your efforts. I also enjoyed the alternusas (not sure I got the spelling correct on that).
Good work!

dude ure story is the s**t. I admit i was a little worried in the start think kei would just punk out and self destructing and all that but i like the way his develop. And you'd better give him the dutches and kari. Other than one of the most excellen hina fanfics plz keep going man. Cuz u got me hooked all the way.

And on that day, there was not much rejoicing. Oddly, many things from this story remind me of my own situations...just with more guns, and explosions...and the all girls inn part...

That said, this was an amazing read and I do thank you for sharing it. It was a very good companion, and I look forward to the next arc...which I will start reading momentarily!

As always, thank you for sharing this work of yours, and allowing us a small glimps into your imagination.

Kanako's entrance most 'epic' speech ever. Must read more o.o