This story is totally amazing and I love it to pieces you have done an incrediable job writing the chapters U should become a writer.. Also I was wondering when are you going to be posting more chapters to this Story I'm dying to know what happens next.

Please Keep up the good work U are a very intelligent writer.

Ok, that was fairly boring, but whatever floats your boat.

I never thought I'd have to give this as a critique, but here goes: you write with too much structure. Some things need to be natural and flowing, and this story is extremely jagged and stepwise, especially in the dialogue.

Keep trying. I trust the next piece of the story will be an improvement...

Love it!

Wright More please!

edward's being a douche, he should just tell bella he's back and how he feels.

Good chapter

love it

love it

Aw man, that's the most evil cliffie EVER!, i'm ding for the next chapter!

Ok so cliffhangers are exciting.

But I HATE CLIFFHANGERS :-)

Hurry please, and put me out of

my misery.

love it

Great story, can't wait for the upcoming chapters, keep up the good work. very detailed and intriguing storytelling :)

Good chapter. It cleared things up that were sort of... up in the air... last chapter. (i.e. Why in the world Edward would ditch Bella after sleeping with her, but Alice would remain.)

The only thing I have a qualm with- and it's a very minor thing- is that you have Edward using "text-speak"... I can easily accept that he's kept up with the times, uses cell phones, and texts in general. However, I'm of the idea that he would still spell things out in text. (And it's not a long one, so he could without it causing problems.) I just can't visualize a 100 year-old vampire using "u" and "ur".

It's just a thought, though.

Still a nice chapter. Thanks! Keep it up!

What will tomorrow hold?

Hurry Please

aw edward is so sweet

This is real good