You need to space your writing out more you know you don't have to hold back on the swearing if you boost the rating because with a game like No More Heros there bound to be worse much worse "If they have an Old ladie wailding a freaking megadeath cannon and and a desgrental mail man wesring a super hero suit and his speal attack is a pelvic thrust of doom yeah a boost in the rating might be needed

Wow man no way belive it or not me and another author were planing on maling a No More Heros Cross over but things got busy anyway could use some work and probaly make it a bit longer if possible

You have potential as your writing isn't bad.. in fact I liked it from what I read.

The problem is that a lot of people simply won't read or review a story unless it's at least 2-5k in words/length. No way to get a good feel for either the author or the story without it being at least that long.

I encourage you to continue but have high hopes that your future stories will have more content/length.

Thanks for writing.