it was interesting. I mean, I haven't thought that deeply why kurogane killed everyone. this story just made it sound sad. but realistic. I mean, I could believe he would behave like that.
and especially I can believe that Fai is the one who helped him to get better.
and that part about enemies at front precious at the back was cool. and that end where Fai was at the back, and yet fighting with him, that was deep.
:)

Oh - this was SUCH a gorgeous and precious gem to read and I truly think you wrote Kurogane so well and with justice. You managed to capture his descent into his violent and monstrous side so well with great, vivid thought processes that seems very meticulous, very how a powerful warrior like him would think. I love how that and the blood motif is used and evolves to show his growth in learning and feeling the meaning of true strength.

This is definitely, and truly, one of the best Kurogane-centric pieces I have had the pleasure to read. I can't praise this enough. :)

Strangely cute (I'm not so sure of that word, now), despite all the mentions to blood and war.

I liked how you wrote the reason why Tomoyo sent him away and the way Kurogane thinks about who is behind him. The characters were very IC, too.

There was some great imagery there, with a great choice of words, and there was definetely a great way to convey all the emotions in the story. I loved the way the romance hid between the lines, how you didn't use the word "love" even once.

So in overall, I really liked it. Great job.

I love the way you use words here. Like the bit about blood dripping in to his mouth, and even though it's dark it's really fitting.

Kyaa, that was wonderful! I'm so happy that this was Kurogane-centric since he's my favorite Tsubasa character. It's a really nice change to see what might have taken place before he got sent on the journey and to compare it with the him before the final battle. And the KuroFai was very very sweet . I like this a lot!

Scratch what I said in the last review; I will review everything I read from now on because you totally deserve every last one of them, even if they all end up say/meaning the same thing: Your story 'rox' my sox.

I really liked this. Non-romantic romances are always refreshing. I love reading between the lines. :3

You kept it very IC, and the build up to it fits in like a glove.

Wow. Just wow. I'm really impressed that you were able to convey such strong emotion by what you DIDN'T say. That is , I love the way you describe Kurogane's warrior mentality thing in the beginning about how it's all about what's in front of you and what's behind you. I thought that was super cool, and very insightful. Also the way you work the same concept in at the end is awesome. Good luck with the Challenge!

Such great imagery. I love the beginning and how you ended it.

I was wondering if this was the infamous romantic piece because it didn't feel much like it. Probably a good thing because there was something else instead and I've mentioned it before but there was a lot of it here so I'll say it again.

You can imitate their thoughts and emotions from the manga with wonderful accuracy and display them in a fantastic way. That's what impressed me with this - the fact that you took everything about Kurogane and his bloodlust and conveyed it precisely, concisely, with good pace, flow and emotion and plenty of beautiful images and metaphors. The way it reads is very honest, clear and poetic in a subdued drama way. I don't actually know if that makes sense lol

) Yay for violence-related romance!

It was confusing, yet it wasn't confusing. Something just didn't seem to be in right place and that why my eyes kept jumping. But still it was right. I liked how you brought out what kind of 'monster' Kurogane was at first -it really hit the point, I must say. It sound like you'd actually seen the same terrified thing as Tomoyo did at that point. I liked really much that point where you talked about that 'sick game' and also that, how you compared things together. Like Kurogane's eyes with blood. They really have similarity, I must say. It's sort of amazing no one (not my knowledge) has brought that out. (I was quite amusing at first how people talked Kurogane's ees were scarlet red...) I also like that 'scream what he was holding in his throat'. Hm, but I didn't like that how you split up this story into, like an two parts. It's not bad thing, but I just didn't like it. But I suggest if you hadn't done it like that way it could had ruin it.

Heh, their confession was really 'weird'. I wont' scold you because I know the challenge, but it was 'weird'. Fai's reaction with that was really cute. The ending sounded really 'hopeful'...Cute, I must say. Comparing to the begging what was 'ghostly'. Heh, this story was full of things to compare, I must admire now. It was nice, even little bit 'heavy' to read. (That doesn't mean it was bad, even I said like that.)

Good job! ;)

I thought it was really good! I especially liked the parargraph that started out with "Fai smiles his own morbid, real smile"... It just fit perfectly, with their characters and with the rest of the story.

~Becca

...really deep...

This. is. INCREDIBLE. Wow. Saying that I loved every tiny bit of it might seem trite, but there it is.

I adore the way you write Kurogane, really I do - the childhood thoughts was incredibly real and sweet and young and the making of an entire philosophy; the reason why his confused self jumped to grab onto the idea and ideal of holding a sword? Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant, and making so much sense. And I adored the contrast of his/their red, and the people before/behind him. I'm a sucker for progressive fics and slow, almost imperceptible changes in mindsets, and this little shiny bit of wonderfulness made my day so. very. much. Of course, the "confession" was tons of love as well *worships*

That said, I also have a bit of concrit, for the balance (and because I'm anal) A typo here: "all weaker then them" and here: "of those who apposed him"

I ved the personification witht he humming sword, that was really neat.

This story was really great, it was fun to read but it seemed a little sad.

At least they'll have a happy future when this is all over, right?