Would have been nice if you had written about when he got his letter for the school and the reaction he got from his family instead of just jumping right to when he go shopping for his school supplies!

It would help if you were to place in your summary that the story has been abandoned.

I think you should spell the word break, not brake.

Unless it means something else in your story

Good luck

Hello, me again, and I found a contradiction. In chapter two we read that Lucius was put to death, however in this chapter we see him alive and referred to as Uncle Lucius.

Umm... I think you might have skipped an important chapter. There currently isn’t a chapter about what happened at that party or Harry getting his letter

Really? You stop a story short (and mark it as complete), then you supposedly rewrite it, and it sits uncompleted since 2012. You are a shitty writer for your readers and I personally will never read your work again.

I would like to know if the times you wrote congregations was it suppose to be congratulations

Reread the first 3 chapters twice where does harry recieve his Delaos letter

good story

What sister?

Yeah you're a giant dumba**.

If he didn't forgive her then why is he smiling at her? Dumba**.

Hi, um... I think I missed the part where Harry got his letter? Or has he not gotten it yet?

I like the concept of this story. Three are a number of things, however, that are really confusing. Never in the story was it mentioned that Harry actually received his letter, which the story's description made it sound like was a pretty big plot point. Next Lucius was dead and then he wasn't? And also Harry's parents know that he and Draco are friends, but suddenly their letters are secret and heaven forbid James and Lily find out the two of them are friendly? In another point in the story it is said that there are only 12 people per dorm, but then an additional 4 are added? I get that they are from the same realm, but wouldn't the four of them be split up into the other dorms, not all crammed into one? There are a lot of OCs, which is fine, but they can get confusing and I am unsure whether all of them are really necessary. The 'best friends' also seem to get mixed a lot for Isadoraas well as her age. And isn't Harry the older son if he is the heir? It was written as the younger son throughout most of the story. And I find it a bit odd that at 11 there are all these couples that love each other. Also, did Isadora spend every moment with Harry since Voldie or did she only visit occasionally in the beginning and later more frequently until she was there permanently? There are a couple other things, like spelling and grammar, but I've gone on long enough as it is. This story has so much potential!

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on the story.