| Reviews for Shinobi of House Telvanni |
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gamerman5603 chapter 5 . 6/20/2012 update soon please |
LordLoverDuck chapter 5 . 5/1/2010 fuck yeah! awesome fic! Q: could i convice you to make this a Naruto/Harem? update soon please, i want to read more |
Watford chapter 5 . 9/30/2009 I really like where you're going with this. Your grammar isn't killing me and the story is intriguing. Keep it coming. |
Hisea Ori chapter 5 . 7/29/2009 way to go nice story. working on the next update? |
The Jester of Fools chapter 5 . 7/21/2009 ...you, dear sir/madam, are a God(dess). This story is excellent in both concept and execution. I have to say, I am a bit disappointed in myself for not finding this story earlier. I do have several questions and comments, though, if you're open to hearing them. 1) I noticed you have a poll up on which magicks you want Naruto to specialize in. By specialization do you mean it in D&D terms (as an example, excelling in one school at the inability to cast another)? 2) For Naruto's weapon, going with his preferred calss of mage, it stands to reason that he'll be physically weaker than his peers, and ebony or daedric weapons and armor would be far to heavy for him to wield correctly. I myself would suggest either glass or elven weapons and armor. 3) Will you have Naruto return to the Cyrodil or Morrowind? If not, how will you play out the rest of the Naruto series? I can understand if you don't want to answer the latter part, I just find myself curious. 4) Because Naruto's 'demon energies' were sucked up by the seal, does that mean that Naruto will never be able to use Kyuubi's powers? Does it mean that all the 'Containers' have the chance to become mages? 5) How will you play out the Yakumo relationship? It is a bit of a rarity and I haven't read/watched Naruto that far (mostly due to my disgust with the author), but I have a decent idea of who she is. 6) Where is naruto getting the schematics for the dwarven machines? The obvious answer is the mage in his head, but I doubt he has a photographic memory of dwemer blueprints which were a severe rarity in the game. 7) On that subject, where is Naruto going to get his materials from? Most of the items and ingredients are specific to that region (Ash salts, kwama egg, gold kanet, etc.) and impossible (or nearly impossible) to find among the Shinobi Nations. Even then, didn't the Shinobi world come from the Demonic Planes? Shouln't Naruto be able to find an old portal and activate it? Or does it fall under number 4? 8) How will Naruto make a living? Obviously since he won't be a ninja, he won't receive mission pay. How do you plan for him to earn money to buy supplies and materials? Foraging for rare plants, animals? Selling potions? Curing people of injuries? 9) Why did you have Naruto tip his hand so soon? You could have kept his identity a secret from the Hokage a bit longer, now he'll probably set up a watch over his property and try and force him into his office for a chat... unless you don't want that. *shrugs* 10) How will this effect the main points of canon? IE: Wave, Chunin Exams, Battle of Konoha, Godaime, Retrieval, etc. (I stopped after retrieval) Because he isn't a part of a shinobi team, he has no reason to follow any of this unless it's a favor to the hokage, a chance to explore, or otherwise. Still it's a bit of a stretch. 11) Speaking of teams, how will you rearrange the graduating teams? Who'll be Naruto's replacement? An OC, Sai, etc. Will you keep the teams canon or rearrange them to your liking? 12) Heh, under your "Dislikes" you have: "Those who insist on forcing incompatible universes to coexist." Some would view the Elder Scrolls and Naruto to be incompatible. (Just poking fun, nothing serious. *winks*) 13) *raises an eyebrow* How do you know Ayleid? *grins* Tell me and I'll teach you Drow. 14) If you have any questions, comments, etc. (or if you just want to talk) you can either send me a PM, or look me up on yahoo messenger (if you have it). Well, thank you for reading all of this (I hope I didn't bore you too much). Feel free to contact me any time. |
some reader 21 chapter 5 . 7/10/2009 Well, because you asked so nicely I'm going to follow your plea and review a little bit...okay? Your story is kinda funny, especially your explaining of the mixing of the two stories...so, that's basically a world worth of information in his head? that's weird, you know... Though the story need some more creatures from the game...and maybe M'Aiq, the liar...that cat was damn funny... |
Vilkath chapter 5 . 6/9/2009 Interesting stuff, though a rather large jump from the last chapter. One the better Naruto/Morrowind xovers i've seen so far. Most them seem bring in to many characters one way or the other, half of naruto cast into the morrowind world.. or vice versa. |
Sephiroth the Unrepentant chapter 5 . 5/28/2009 "“I am tired. If you don’t mind, I shall retire to my tower for now. Feel free to drop by if you should have any more questions. Goodbye ojii-san.”" Utterly stupid to tell the Hokage who he is. Why mention it when he knows he can't explain himself. I am starting to wonder if your one of those retards who actually like the way canon Naruto series is preceding and read crappy fanfiction by people like neonzangutsu and kyuubi 16. |
Sephiroth the Unrepentant chapter 2 . 5/27/2009 I forgot to mention in my last review. Please don't make Sakura or Sasuke a big part of the story. I hate both their characters and the only way either could be done well is if you rewrite their entire personality from the beggining of their life which would pretty much make them OC characters. |
Sephiroth the Unrepentant chapter 3 . 5/27/2009 At this point I would have had the weird energy that is connecting to the sigil stone make another realm similiar to what the Daedric Princes have but reflecting Naruto not Daedric Princes. It could be a personal realm of Naruto's where he controls everything including time and space. I wouldn't do anything else with Elder Scrolls to be honest. Throwing in Magicka and a Telvanni Wizard is enough of a change. Adding too much just complicates things which is something a new author shouldn't do. Not only will it be hard to write if you add in too much stuff but you may not find it fun writing the story since it's so complicated and may give up. |
God of wind4 chapter 5 . 5/27/2009 Bloody Hell this is a great story! I like how you set the whole thing up. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Vanbor the Fire Mage chapter 5 . 5/27/2009 great chapter |
evon2evon chapter 5 . 5/27/2009 wonderfull story. cant wait to see naruto's discusion with sarutobi and later the council ;) keep the good work up |
Agato - The Hadou Inari chapter 4 . 5/8/2009 Overall the story is great. The only problem I see is that you need to at least try to make the chapters a bit longer. |
Vanbor the Fire Mage chapter 4 . 4/25/2009 Very intersting story. Will there be a pairing for this story? |