Obviously you haven't updated this is a very long time, but I wanted to point out a flaw.

You said that Abby's birthday was 2 days after Harry's. However, they are siblings. It takes someone 9 months to finish their pregnancy, so Harry and Abby would have to be at least 9 months apart in age.

This was pretty much just made with the "Find/Replace" function of your chosen word processor, changing "Harry" to "Harry and Abby", right?

honestly, I don't really like how you just kind of copied the book. it's not very original. should have added more of your own plots to it, would have made it lot more interesting.

this is kindo of confusing...?

This is really cool! Keep going!

you wrote t well and it was clear to read tho bit confusing in some aspects well done

:)

please hurry with the next one!

Can I also point out that they can't both be the person who lived because couldn't of hit them both with one shot.

You skipped a lot of key elements...

it kind of just jumped from one place to another with no real transition...

Wow, this is the most unoriginal story I have laid eyes on. Maybe is the beginning wasn't exactly like the book with the exception of your character's name, this wouldn't be so bad. But sadly it is.