BTW, Mizuno's father is found alive ten years later. His mother also has another baby, a girl, and Mizuno's life changes because of those events. On top of that, there is also puberty for him. Just letting you know.

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Change Takehiko's name back to Mizuno because it fits more.

Great job. That is really good. Only question is, does this happen in Bleach? It should!

PLEASE CONTINUE WITH THIS STORY!

So, I read your end notes at the bottom of your chapters. It is not only your story. This belongs to all the readers who take time out of their day to read your work. You treat this like you don't care about your quality and don't take a small amount of time to check someone's name on Google. It is a good story idea, I like the story, but you need to know that it doesn't only belong to you. Once you post it, it belongs to your readers as well.

Please continue!

Okay, I'm usually nice with reviews. But this story just pissed me off. And as a little advice, TAKE OUT THE DAMN ANNOUNCEMENT"CHAPTERS". Also, sup with the author notes. And in my opinion, what rukia is doing with her cold is just cruel. Every child deserves to have the right to know their father. Every child. If you want to reply, I'm UltimateNinjaMaster. I didn't log in for this because i didn't like it enough.

This chapter was amazing! It made me shudder with excitment! Keep writing please!

Ichigo said: "Rukia, open your bra. I want to see your breast." Rukia answers: "No Ichigo! I don't believe You want this while you're dying. I have another idea, how about rolling in the bed while wearing bra?" Ichigo rejects: "Let's do it Rukia! Let's do our sex. Our last sex." Suddenly, something happens... "Ichigo! Why does Your chest get cold?" said Rukia. Isshin kurosaki said: "He has already die You know my sexy Rukia. Now You're mine!" suddenly, "Suicide Hakuren!" Ishhin stare... "No... No... Nooo...! Don't die my sexy Rukia! I will follow You to die if You kill Your self." Orihime is suddenly come to Isshin. She said: "Do You want to be my husband my un-sexy man?" Orihime starts to open her clothes. And said: "I'm so seeexy... You know?" Isshin can't say anything. Because of Orihime's over-sexy, Isshin died.

WHY! WHY DOES THIS KEEP HAPPENING TO ME! Every time I find a good fan fiction, it ends right in the middle.

No! Keep wrighting its aswsome! Please countinue

no! why does this always happen to me! well, i hope you can resume this story soon! just dont abbandon this lovely sad fic!

when r u going to post the next chapter?

Not bad. But you might want to refrain from making so many Author Notes within the text. It breaks up the story flow.

Anyway, I look forward to seeing how your characters develop later. (By the way, Keitorin reminds me of Ichigo's childhood friend who he fought with, Takashi I believe was her name. They are both depicted as tough)