| Reviews for Fire Expert |
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  Guest chapter 1 . 3/3/2016 Love it hope u write more. Love to see some about after he got his real hands back and what sensation that brings. Like at the end of book 7. |
 darknesse13 chapter 1 . 1/1/2014 Wow this is really addicting. I really like this story so good job :) The only thing I would recommend is to try and be more detailed in your description of the scenario and setting the tone for your stories. But other than that I thought it was awesome, keep writing! |
| Ketychan chapter 1 . 9/26/2013 That was so cool _ I love your Vassalord stories |
| the.heart.crest chapter 1 . 8/9/2013 aaaw, cute love tentacles... especially when they're naughty... *wink* well... one last thing, could it be that you often make a new paragraph, whenever you get close of the last one? because your sentences sometimes are split at unlogic moments. for example: "...and pet the soft blonde hair. " if so, try not to do that, since it's sometimes a little confusing... but that's not such a big deal anyhow... keep going that way! |
| SalinaSwathe chapter 1 . 7/15/2013 Adorable and sexy at the same time! I loved it! |
| fuuma82 chapter 1 . 7/11/2013 Damnit! Why did Rayflo have to be such a gentleman?! We want moreeeee *frustated cries* |
| ZombieDollXIII chapter 1 . 3/14/2013 The power of the horny tentaclessss! XD Poor Cherry! :D |
| YoungAthletesOnIce chapter 1 . 4/8/2011 The tentacle thing was very percy. Love it. I might borrow it from you to do my own tentacle story but whatever. I am ONCE AGAIN disappointed there was no "thrusting" between Johnny and Cherry! AH! IT'S EXTREMELY FRUSTRATING! Please write another one. -yaoi10 |
| Poison'd chapter 1 . 8/24/2010 You seem to have Rayflo's character down pretty well, but Cherry didn't feel quite right. Before the monster turns him lustful, he seemed to be slightly off in character. I can't imagine he would dive to prevent Rayflo from burning himself. He would likely tell him not to do it, but I would imagine he'd be stoic afterwards; that he wouldn't care (especially since Rayflo can heal himself). At any rate, I liked the plot of your storyline. It was amusing especially since Rayflo made them late to the place they'd stay at. The only sad thing was that it felt like the story moved to fast and I wanted to enjoy it more. However, the plot was entertaining. Thank you for the wonderful read! |
| Hi chapter 1 . 11/25/2009 Continue this it has a ggod plot |
| Commander Link chapter 1 . 8/15/2009 omg i loved this story! i kinda wished that there was a little more Rayflo/Cherry yaoi, but that's okay because i'm sure that you've written another fic that does, so i'm going to read your other stories. |
| fanoftheworld chapter 1 . 8/2/2009 ..kind of anti-climatic, but sweet. |
| SonofLuffy chapter 1 . 6/10/2009 nice chapter/story lol |
| Ominous Rain chapter 1 . 5/31/2009 What i want to know was what was the monster?O.o |
| uindo chapter 1 . 5/26/2009 Woot ! I like what u did wit da story _ |
