You wrote this ages ago, and I'm just now reading it. It's really good. Someone should make a movie out of it. Congrats! And Bravo!

i really enjoyed this! You're a really good author, i gotta say I went into the mummy fanfiction not expecting a lot, but you clearly did research, made even the villains three dimensional and added your own little bits of philosophy to boot. Well done. :)

great chapter

great chapter

Really enjoyed your story, it was great!

WOW.

I really love this story. You give such depth into your characters and provide reasons for the things they did and the paths they took. Throughout the films, I had found myself feeling pity for Imhotep but beyond that? I hadn't really looked at it the way you did. By the end of your story, I found that I didn't want him to be evil and be defeated. I wanted him to make the right choice. You expanded Ancksunamun's character in a way I never thought possible. I admit that I hated her in the films but I really liked her in your story. The way you described the past was amazing. It still effected the present. Each character had their own story. Anyway, enough from me, I just wanted to say how much I loved reading this story. I hope you write more in the future. Its hard to find this kind of quality.

Midnight Glade

Up to chapter 7 and really liking the story so far: Just one little quibble here:

"When he was done, there was only one country left in the world: Egypt. And there were six major territories, controlled and conquered by Egypt: Arabia, the Russe, Europa, the Orient, the Americas, and the Southland. Imhotep named the rest of Africa the Southland in deference to Anck-su-namun, for in Ancient times it was not known what lay down the Nile, what lay in the deserts to the South."

See I'm from Australia and while I'm sure the Australians in your story are happy to be ignored by the world conquering bad guy it would be nice to be noticed

*Is speechless*

Um. WOW.

This story is beyond words, but I'll try my best here: -

Something along the lines of that, at any rate. This story is a masterpiece. Truly. I've strived my whole life (grand total of 16 years) trying to create something that even comes CLOSE to your writing skill. I loved the plot, the characters, the settings, the basic feel to it, everything. So...thank you. Thank you so much for writing this and sharing your talent with us.

Best of luck,

~ Estora ~

As before, you do the Med-Jai culture so profoundly. The reader really gets swept up. It's incredible.

I love how you constantly reference moments in the movies to validate your points, too. It makes the characters seem more real.

My one problem with this chapter was Rashid's words about killing innocent people to stop Imhotep. The first movie makes it clear that the Med-Jai are not above that, when Evelyn asks, "And you think this justifies the killing of innocent people?" Ardeth responds, quickly, "Yes."

But I'll entertain the idea that the elders would have an honorable stand against it. I love your characters, and the depth you write them with makes every thought and action seem so authentic.

As always, your scenes between Anck and Imhotep are spectacular. You write Anck so well-you give her such life and soul, and you differentiate her from Meela so smoothly.

I love it. And I want to read more.

So, I like Anjelica. I remember thinking her character was incredibly complex, and she really is. I like her quite a bit.

I'm not too sure how I feel about the whole gods/goddesses thing, but then, they have been referenced in the story enough. We know they play a part.

I don't care for some of Rick's dialogue, honestly. I mean, it's good, but it's not really him. Rick O'Connell doesn't really talk like that. A lot of his lines were too dramatic and poetic. I felt like his speech was a little out of character.

But, yet again, another amazing chapter. This story is pretty much incredible.

So, this chapter is great.

It's just so happy-right in the middle of all the doom and hopeless of their whole situation, we get something. Yay!

I really like Jonathan as a the hero. It's so...original. A nice twist, definitely.

I have to read on.

I absolutely love the way you represent the Med-Jai. You give them such an amazing, authentic culture. Even more impressive-you gave each of the elders different personalities. I enjoyed that a lot.

I also like Sakina, dead and only known through mention though she is. I like that she's the kind of woman Ardeth wanted as a wife. It's like a kick to the ol' Mary Sue groin...not that Mary Sue would have said groin...er...nevermind.

Just, a really great chapter. I loved the moment between Ardeth and Adil, too. Incredible.

Another amazing chapter. I love it when authors delve into the relationship between Anck and Nefertiri, and this put an interesting twist on an old musing. I like the differentiation between the women, and how Ank knows she hates Nefertiri rather than Evy; how Evy knows she hates Meela rather than Anck.

It's really intriguing. I know it develops in later chapters, I just don't remember how. So, obviously, I'm anxious to see.

As always, nice work.