Okay so I know you wrote this like forever ago but I stumbled across it last night and I'm just so completely in awe of your command of the written word. I can genuinely say that I would be hard pressed to find published literature that moved me as much as this has from both an emotional and intellectual standpoint. This is honestly a work of art. I love how you have so fully expressed their total and undying love for each other in so few words. Additionally, I also loved how much you focused on the emotional depth of a scene of intimacy, where so many authors choose to focus on the physical gratification of such a moment. I feel almost spoiled reading this, because I doubt I'll be able to find any other piece of literature, fanfiction or original, that has impressed me with its romance so greatly. I do believe I shall look on this story when I need to be inspired by masterful romance authorship. Very well done!

I loved both sides of this scene, you really brought forth the intimacy and affection between them. Well done!

Beautiful! I'm reminded of the lyrics from the musical Hamilton: Oh, let me be a part of the narrative
In the story they will write someday
Let this moment be the first chapter:
Where you decide to stay
And I could be enough
And we could be enough
That would be enough

You know the saying that there is always room for improvement?
Whoever says that has obviously never read this.
This is perfectly, wonderfully exquisite. I am a little wary of blatant descriptions of the love of man and wife (which tends to frighten me a little, to be honest), but I understand the desire for a little detail. This strikes just the right balance (and doesn't frighten me at all).
Merci for writing this (and for helping me see that there can be purity in this sort of love, too).
-Ritz

Amazing! Any fan of Percy and Marguerite's love would adore this! Your writing style is very eloquent, the couple's witty banter is perfect, and the whole piece is absolutely heart-melting without being, as you say, "smutty". After recently finishing the book and watching the 1982 film, I'm ecstatic that I found this. They will always be my ideal couple, and this will always be my ideal portrayal of their love, which was, as you point out, not as evident in the books as one would hope. Very, very good job!

MD

Don't let the mention of Sir Percy's personal apartments in "Elusive" frighten you. All that indicates is that they're wealthy enough and Richmond big enough for them to each to have a suite of their own; it doesn't mean they don't sleep together. Helen Huntingdon is "The Tenant of Wildfell Hall" had her own room to lock herself in when she and her husband were obviously still physically intimate. Several scenes in Elusive and Eldorado make me think the Blakeneys prefer outside in those gardens and bowers they're always mentioning or imagining, if you know what I mean. Your fic is fully compatible with the couples' scenes throughout the sequels that make me think the Blakeneys are one of the most passionate married couples in all of literature.

this pretty much made me cry...

artfully written and i believe it truly explains the dynamic of their relationship which is at points poignantly sad :(

I LOVE THIS STORY SO SO SO SO SO MUCH!

Percy and Margot never get scenes like this in the book, and it disappoints me. OMG! I love it.

beautiful

OH. MY. GOD.

I am speechless!

Your fanfic is, without any semblance of a doubt, THE BEST Percy/Marguerite story I have EVER read! You continue the articulate rhetoric of Baroness Orczy's writing flawlessly! I too was so frustrated by the primness of Baroness Orczy's writing (although her concept and effectuation were BRILLIANT!) but you have captured the almost painful physical adoration they hold for one another - the deep need, the connection of two souls. Just breathtaking!

Thank you thank you thank you for making my day with this eloquent, powerful, touching, thrilling story! X

Oh my gosh, quite possily the most beautifully written fic I've ever read :-D

Modelled the characters perfectly - Pretty sure it was what the good barones was thinking, just couldnt bring to paper! lol.

Fabulous.

Jess

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Beautiful. I think you captured them pretty well. I find myself strained for words, but the word "beautiful" comes to mind again.

I adore this fic. Who knew hair-ribbons could be so swexy? This is so well written. I'm glad that you solved the rating dilemma. This is probably what I would have done with it also. Percy and Marguerite are so in love, it's adorable. I'm glad to be reading it again!

Very, Very nice! The section with Percy's point of view flows a little more evenly as narrative, I think, that the section from Marguerite's point of view, but they are both well done. It seems to me, reading this, that you hear Percy's voice more clearly, but I could be wrong; I'd be interested to know whether you found yourself moving back and forth between the two sections as you composed, or whether you wrote them sequentially.

Anyway, it's a really clever, thoughtful, and evocative concept. Thank you so much for a good read!

Ah, even though I've read this before you published it, it deserves another round of applause!

Thank you so much for writing this! I must confess that sometimes I just don't feel that intimacy that Orczy is hinting at because she doesn't really let Percy and Marguerite be close. You've recreated a wonderful scene here that is very believable and charming.

Their "game" is my favorite! Very in character! I only wish Orczy had taken time to give us something like this.

(I might add that your intro cracked me up, you OCD person...I think have indeed succeeded in covering your bases in warning us, eh?)