Amazing! Stupid spider...

Wow! Great story!

OMG, I might cry. I have no words.

Wow.
I enjoyed this, makes you really think his selfishness through ;)

I like the spider and butterfly metaphor. I wrote a story with a very similar theme but an even more oblivious Edward called Careful. Mine isn't really sad, though, it's more like a horror story.

Freaking sad as hell! I had to stop for a couple of moments to cry...still was good though.

i absolutly love this story! it was such a sad anding but yet so touching and amazing. i love this peice of beauty you have made.

That was well written.

Enjoyable to read, though it was sad.

Why did she wait so long? (I ask, mournfully)

Phew! Harsh! This story is devastating, but absolutely brilliant.

This line slayed me: "And she didn't mind the roving existence, exactly, because she was always with you, always precious to you, but she did mind being treated like she was too delicate, like she wasn't allowed to change, when in fact changing was all she ever did, and you never paid attention."

What a shame!

Great job! Thank you for writing.

Oh my god this is exquisite, but so dreadfully sad. I could die.

This is just so beautifully written

lines like this

. And even though you still want to make love to her, you're sure you can't.

and

this

She was happy to go on loving your soul, but she wanted everything else, too, every part of you, and you never let her have it

broke my heart.

This was just so gorgeous and I adore it.

Amazing. It's so good, if someone used this to show Edward how wrong he is, it just might get through to him. Which is really saying something. Ha ha! ;)

Great job!

This is, by far, the most sad one shot I have ever read. It is just purely amazing how you can portray so much emotion in less than 2 thousand words. I am in tears right now.

I love how you wrote this story in second person. It wouldn't have been the same if it was any different. My God, you are an amazing author, and this is an amazingly, moving, tragic story.

Thank you so much.

I loved this. It was flawlessly written and very powerful. I do think things might well have ended up this way. Excellent work!

Its so sad : (

But you have done well, I like the way you have written this : )