That's it?! Where's the rest of it?!

Sounds like such a Draco thing to do...
Loved it!

Hi,

I like this! Bittersweet indeed! I think, no I'm sure you're one of my favorite authors. Please check my work out? If you want, off course
xxx

The last few lines are incredibly creepy.

Ok, I'm still not sure if constructive criticism is appreciated, but I think you have Skill and Quality, so I also think (in some projection of my own psyche onto you) that you can handle Pointers (not that I am anyone to-

Well, you get the point.

My biggest complaint about this story is this line: "I'll make you dig those six feet and throw yourself into the casket beside me."

I love this line, I really do, but it seems rather out of keeping with the rest of the tone of this. Why would she throw herself anywhere after him?

"I wish I was more than a coward on a few occasions" Sounds a little ungainly. Really, it's just the 'on a few occasions' that I dislike.

"This evil is all your fault, and you should be a Slytherin for it." So is even he saying that all Slytherins are evil? There is nothing in this piece suggesting cunning or trickery on her part, so I'm not sure why he would assign her to a house he always seemed to be quite proud of.

I appreciate how you open with a deconstruction of "mudblood". Quite in keeping with both of their characters, I think. Furthermore, the entire premise of this sketch is quite enjoyable (satisfying?). I like that he's not trying to accomplish anything or deviating from the canon characterization of him as cowardly.

"Laughable, isn't it? How utterly disgusting I am in my thoughts. How weak they are. How ridiculously romantic and sappy – traitorous, even." This, I think, is as near a real Draco-in-love as is possible. I can't see him accepting his feelings for her as simple fact. Excellent.

Overall, I'm quite pleased with this. It sounds to me a bit like a good reaction to reading bad fanfiction; pert, almost, when compared to some other stuff on here. Taken simply as a letter than a frustrated young man who is desperately trying to get a girl to notice him through any means, great. My heart goes out to Draco.

gorgeous.

Very interesting take on Draco's secret thoughts; completely in character and plausible, and oddly sweet despite itself.

Bad? Huh? Its really well written :)

The bit at the end, six feet something made it seem a bit like he was at her grave, confessing.

But just the mournful feel, wow. Powerful!

bz x

You may not think it's the best of quality, but I find it intriguing.

dude. loved it. but the beggining was just a little confusing at first, cause i had to figure who was talking. then again, its 3 in the morning so im kinda slow.

It's a wonderfully written one-shot. I congratulate you on your talent at being able to manipulate words and filling them with such power. Reading this, felt like living it. It sounds so much like Draco's character that he almost seemed part of reality.

yours in friendship

(: Acacia

D/Hr - I think this was one my first HP fandoms, and that first fandom being so many years ago, I've lost much enthusiasm with it - until I read this. I'll never get tired saying I love your writing, especially when it comes to the sarcasm (and how I love sarcasm), the dark overtones.

Much love goes to this, by the way: "I’ll make you dig those six feet and throw yourself into the casket beside me." Morbidly made of pure win. Keep writing! XD

Great story...I love how Draco's too much of a coward to tell Hermione, and the delightfully gory second-to-last paragraph xD

Grammar's excellent. You might want to consider expanding it into a separate story somehow, perhaps one not epilogue-compliant? or that deals with the aftermath of Hermione's reading the letter? Just some ideas. Overall, great sightly dark oneshot.

Please review my story! I'm dying for good reviews.

This is a great one-shot

quite intense... poor Draco

i love this...it's pure drama. and in this case, crazy good drama.