Wow. That is all I can say.

Great story! I liked each chapter very much!

So long, Susan. They all had hopes for you, but looks like their hopes were misplaced.

Totally Awesome. It was a very interesting story, and i enjoyed it so much...

I really appreciated this story. It was very well written and an interesting look into each of the Pevensies' thoughts. I though Susan's chapter, although the shortest, had just as much effect and emotioon as the other three. (And referring to Narnia as "it" reminded me of "A Wrinkle in Time" -another story I love.)

However, I don't think you quite got Peter right. I found your story to be well written in all other aspects but this one little part. You wrote him out in all of his sibling's chapters to be so wonderful, but I didn't get that from his own chapter. He seemed completely out of touch. None of the caring that you implied in the other chapters came through.

The schools scenes, I think are a good example. In Edmund and Lucy's he ran off to be with his friends. I can see how that left a good window to showcase Susan, but in doing so, I believe you may have take away part of Peter's character.

That being said -in a long and drawn out way,- I really did enjoy your story. Please keep writing!

Um, this review is going to be very sort compared to all the others...

Im not crying aloud or anything, but Im sobbing on the inside. I know she still has time to figure out everything, but her tone is just so hopeless and its so sad...

- Annie/Prose

I loved reading from Lucys POV, shes my favorite Pevensie next to Edmund. From the first sentence, I extra-loved this chapter. (Aw, I dont get a prize for guessing Ed and Peter? :P) I liked the little note about Edmund joining in the doll games, it was so quirky and cute. :D

Ooh, I love Susans intuition with the blacksmith. I cant say I ever exactly thought of her as a "comforter", but its not totally out there when I read about it. She is, after all, the Gentle. ;)

And Lucy goes into more detail about Susans denial! It was kind of heartwrenching, especially since Edmund wasnt really surprised. "We all knew we had lost Susan." It was a hard line for me to read.

This is getting really really good (it was already good when I first read it), and I wasnt expecting another chapter after Lucy, but thatll make it all the more satisfying, I guess. :)

- Annie/Prose

Aw! I was very able to relate to this chapter, except from Susans point of view (if that makes sense). I have a guy-friend whom I consider very much like a little brother, and when I put on a front before other people, Ill break down in front of him. (He still needs time to get used to it, though. :P) Im still a bit surprised that Peter hasnt seen Susan cry, yet I wasnt shocked at all when Edmund said that he had seen her cry 3 times in his life. We dont see much of a close relationship between these two in CoN (or at least /I/ dont), but ever since reading Edmunds defense of Susan in Prince Caspian (after Lucy scolds Susan), I kind of assumed there was some sort of closeness between them. I really like how you highlighted that in this chapter.

Aw, and she was his confidante in his "difficult" period. That specific part actually made me like Susan a bit more, because she was so patient and gracious with him. I found it really sweet that she was never angry with him.

And of course Edmund would be the one who sees the signs in Susan! And he wasnt angry at her; I love that little role reversal. Its still so like him to worry over her constantly. And I never thought of him to know Susan so well as he seems to in this, but I kind of take comfort in that idea.

I especially appreciated this chapter, as Edmund is one of my favorite Pevensies. You portrayed his character so well (you did with Peter, too, but I especially liked this one), and thanks again for writing this. Ill be reading the next chapter in a few minutes/seconds. :)

- Annie/Prose

This is one of the few Su-fics that I really, really like. I love reading Peters thoughts about Susan, he almost seems to depend on her, more than I ever thought he did. I never really saw their relationship this way before now, and its kind of neat to see it this way.

I also liked the argument "scene" - thats so Susan-ish of her! :P And its also really relatable, Ive had to dig through the trash to find something my mom threw away. :P I especially liked Susans comment about Edmund, I sort of took it as a "mom-thing", where she saw him younger than he really is. (Or something. Im not sure how to word it. :P)

A line that stood out to me was, "I dont talk to my sister Susan anymore. Properly, I mean. We exchange niceties when we see each other, but I havent spoke to Susan herself for quite some time." To me, it kind of showed the change in Susan. Ive seen a lot of people just make her vapid, shallow, and stuck-up, but this here went much deeper than any of that other stuff. I like the idea that her true self wouldve have done that. It sort of gives me hope that she could come back, if she wanted to.

- Annie/Prose

I like it so far. I hope to read this again.

Very, very, very good! You have Susan's character and mindset spot-on in this epilogue. Everything she writes ties in with previous chapters and the canon of your own fics as well! But the thing that resonates with me the most is that she refers to Narnia (and possibly Aslan?) simply as "it." This says so much with so little fuss. "It" tells us that Susan is in such pain and turmoil that she cannot even articulate the concept of Narnia, but since she does need the emotional outlet of writing in the journal of her siblings, she must assign Narnia a neutral title. That was a stroke of brilliance on your part, my friend! And her line "To all of you, goodbye." "All of you" implies not just her siblings, but Narnia and Aslan as well. ::Very:: good!

i enjoyed this epilogue a lot, even though it is sad. i think you captured susan perfectly in her responses to each of her siblings, which is understandable. It fits very nicely. i do hope to see more writings of yours in the future! )

I've been enjoying this story secretly. I'm a big fan of these Pevensie quartets (I can't seem to stop writing them), and you've written a very lovely and original one. I especially like Edmund's chapter. He would understand her the best of the three, I think. And Susan's entry into this book was heart-wrenching yet believable. I think the decision to portray her pain without an immediate redemption was a good decision. The bitterness seems more believable that repentance. Well done! :)

Very powerful, though I disagree with the outcome (and you can probably understand why; I just always hope for her return). The true epilogue to this story would probably be written some years after her monumental loss, as she continues to look around her in England and find people who need her help. As you've shown Susan, she doesn't think or talk; she does things. It's action that will save and heal her. I've always envisioned her going into something like nursing-and remember, in this postwar period, she'd find a lot of other people who lost loved ones, including perhaps Holocaust survivors. So that's what I envision Susan coming round to. I can certainly see, though, that at the first moment of loss, this is how she would have behaved. This is remarkably powerful. Write on!

This was fantastic. Loved the tone; loved the depth. The characterization was without a doubt some of the best I have ever seen in a fanfic, and I love the touch of Blanche DuBois you put into Susan. Adding this to my favorites.