this seems somewhat unrealistic that someone with such a huge tech advantege get's cought so easily

Very good story! I have read the other version and this one is my favor. I hope you complete both!

So... A thousand planets under Alesia and yet their population haven't even hit a trillion whereas earth, single planet, 5billion. That's kinda sad you know, the military size in SG verse is so pathetic compared to Earth, makes you feel Earth itself makes up 20% of the canon galaxy's total population

Woow that was quite the read! I started reading your story about 30 hours ago :D
I have to congratulate you on your improvements of writing skills...I'm far from being a military strategist and I actually hate geography but your battle scenes are so good that I could almost picture them entirely!
Hope to see new chapters soon!

And you get A BIG LIKE from me!

The Govenor is indeed very smart to get the attention of SG-1 and the rest of humanity eventually. It does seem like Renatte is forming some kind of bond with O'Neill, no? :P

The beginning seemed a bit...abrupt...to me...you seem to really be covering a lot of ground in a short time. But the writing itself is solid. As well as the pacing and the plot information.

great chapter , Keep the good writing and hope for more updates soon

like how you use "steer" for moving the battlsehip in a certain direction; pr efer it over "pilot" b/c it'sa ship not a flightcraft as I view it, like a fighter or bomber

yup I like your Golden Dawn concept so much that I'm no re-reviewing a chap here

did you mean anti-reetou weapon for what Teal'c was using to fight Cestus? I'm curious how good the Go'auld/Tok'ra were able to construct a weapon which would reveal an ALESIAN cloaked individual.

The speech of Chiyou, is it inspired from Rassilon's speach in "The End of Time", in Doctor Who ?

Nicely portrayed both sides of the war and Amann got what he deserved for what he did to the planet but over 60 billion dead by the Tok'ra? And over 20 billion dead by the Alesian? Heavy numbers.

remember that the gaou'ld evolved after the alterans left the MW galaxy so they would have found the ship (the supposed super advanced ship) before the gaou'ld since they ruled 100% of the galaxy before the plague.

but good story even though you may have done a few things wrong

such as

- the ancients were working on Arcturus energy sources before their defeat at the hands of the wraith the alesia would have perfected this technology because it is basically limitless energy and much better than anti-matter reactors.

- city ships can withstand multiple years of bombardment with 3 zpm's at a worst case scenario. you make it seem like zpms are not very good power sources when in fact they are basically mini universes in a bottle.

- why would an acended ori be trying to destroy the asteria empire if they interfere or enter the MW the acended ancients would kill them. even if the ori is just lurking.

- the ''red devil'' is over powered how can one ship down several aurora class and higher class ships shields when they are supposedly powered by zpm's and anti-matter reactors.

and how did he manage to clone close to 500 million soldiers with only limited resources and as such how did he build so many ships that fast ?

even anubis was only producing 10-12 hataks a week. somehow he manufactured thousands in a space of 2-4 months?

i could go on for a long time but these are some of the more pressing matters you must attend to

if that dark energy being is an ori your story is flawed.

because the ancients have hidden the MW galaxy from the ori. and destroy any that tries locating/entering it.

so far, simple arithmetic fail... at least twice that I noticed.

Incredibly awesome and well wrote out story! Great imagination behind it all as well! Hope to see more of it soon!

Awesome read! Well wrote out battles as well! While I am enjoying this eminsely, and have yet to get into futher chapters, my only dislike is lack of the SGC and such, but will still be continuing to read it.