I loved this story. It was enrapturing, it stayed real. It wasn't a cliche. I look forward to reading more of your work.

This is really good, and I don't say that often for twilight fiction (not a huge fan of the books, and personally I think this is better than anything in the actual books :) ) I love how you developed the friendship and didn't have the whole 'Oh wow I am in love with this person who I just met because she's hot' sort of thing and that you didn't force it to happen using the werewolf-love thingy (can't remember the name) and how it doesn't have a perfect ending, and how Jacob isn't obsessed with the girl and ends up having his own life. Wow that's a lot but any way I did like this story a lot!

I hope you have done a sequel. Cos UNHAPPY endings suck. At least that was a well written one lol.

Great. Amazing. Fabitty fab :D

Gray is in america I think lol, but I don't know. I usually just say "grey"

Great chapter, I don't usually like twilight OC's though.

ARGHH! I forgot the message! Something like..history sent me or something?

Amazing, and I'm sure you know it :D

I love this chapter , and can't wait to read the next one.. off I pop :D

nice story. i liked the ending. kinda funny my sister's name is mikayla, spelled the exact same way.

keep up the wonderful work.

- dahliax4

OMG I LOVE THIS STORY THATS HOW I SPELL MY NAME AND I LOVE THIS STORY DEFINATLY ONE OF MY MOST FAVOURITE STORYS!

definately do a sequel! thats the best one ive read in awhile

AhMaZiNg story! Luv every little piece of it!

El sequal de Mikayla's Jacob?

Really Ally? Really?

... *snorts* dork.

My blasted computer submit a review when I had barely written anything. Therefore, I am combining both 9 and 10 together.

Chapter 9:

1) When most people were sad, they either tried to hide it or made it painstakingly obvious in order to obtain sympathy. (YES! MY GOSH I HATE THAT! BUT I HATE HOW IF YOU JUST FROWN OR ARE EMOTIONLESS, THEY ASK YOU WHAT'S WRONG. LIKE IT'S ILLEGAL TO NOT HAVE AN EMOTION. IF I DON'T SMILE 24/7, SOMETHING IS JUST PLAIN WRONG. YOU PREACH THE TRUTH ALLY! GO 'HEAD GIRL! DO YO THANG!)

2) I frowned. Things were going to get weird after all. (FOR SOME STRANGE REASON, THAT MADE ME SMILE. I DON'T KNOW WHY. OR HOW. IT JUST DID.)

3)I needed to lose her on my own terms; it would be my descision, not hers. (... *awe*)

CHAPTER 10

1) I just leaned against the door pathetically until I heard it click (Such an interesting line. The way you arranged it, it was insanely interesting.)

Critique:

- The settings are usually the same, Math then home. But I liked how you switched it up a bit to the basement (science wing much?) and other areas. I'm asking you to do this because I think you're a far better, maybe even more advanced writer than I am. I want you to try to make Jacob's emotions match his settings. Do a whole Dickens thing. Mess around with the settings. Happiness! Find something that Jacob sees beauty or wonder in. Like the way you see ugly things and think wonderful of them. I try to think like that, but I'm a vain creature as you know. And do me a favor Bo-Bally, lighten up alright? Take some estrogen or something.

1)

Okay, these lines are my favorite, and I feel the need to bring your fantastic-ism to the table.

1) Strong, emotionally deep sentence, profound and impacting.

"I suppose I'm just attracted to nice people. I guess its because they're everything I'm not and everything I wish I could be. Because they weren’t hypocrites and I was. Because nice is an alien concept to me most of the time. Because I'm always drawn to the impossible."

2)*sniffs air* Do I smell details here?

" It wasn’t dark out, but it wasn’t light either. The sun hadn’t risen yet; the moon hadn’t set. The stars, though, were invisible behind the clouds that were starting to roll in. I sighed again, and soon, the sounds of my father cooking eggs reached my ears. Not much later, the smell assailed my nose, but I wasn’t hungry. I wanted to get to school, to see Mikayla, to make sure nothing had actually changed."

oh my god... she's in love with jacob right?

awesome chapter, update soon :]