The over all plot of your story is good... however, it moves far too quickly. It reads more like small sections of a story put together as plot points. Once she was raped, how would they immediately know she was pregnant? It says one year but the pregnancy was somehow a few months and then the children grew up to around Shippo’s age within that time, all in one chapter? They are somehow able to travel huge distances and interact with each other when Edo is maybe more than a few days travel to the Shiro? Even their development is too quick and all in one chapter. It’s a good story plot but there isn’t enough... idk, I guess a good metaphor would be: There isn’t enough meat on the sandwich. Just two slices of bread.
I couldn’t bring myself to finish it.
I’m not trying to sound harsh or anything, I just don’t know how else to say it.

I LOVE this story! ! ! ! OXD
(Though it could use some editor help.)
I actually found this story on Archive of Our Own. It was actually an accident when I found it on this site, and I am REALLY glad that I did, because it's not complete on the other site.

omg it was amazing. i loved it keep doing what you love to do and be happy with what you love to do and enjoy it.

Kinda sad it ended so crappy

MIZUKI IS SOOO CUTE! I LOVE HER!

HOLY... He called her daughter... *giggles*

DUN DUN DUNNNN!

INUYASHA'S AFRAID OF SESSHOMARU?!
HOW DARE NARAKU!?

Me: Inuyasha... on his hands AND KNESS!? AND WHIMPERING?! *faints*
Alter-ego: I JUST CAN'T PICTURE IT! MY INU BABY, ON THE GROUND WHIMPERING!? *faints*

Aww. Kagura, why are you sad?

I LOVE SESSY'S DEMON! HE IS DA BOMB!
HE CALLED HER MATE?!*fangirling*

I'M GETTING EXCITED!

I had such a hard time reading this I eventually gave up, I like the plot but it needs work, like lots of work. First off the first thing her mum says "oh dear, do u think u might be pregnant" is unrealistic. Second her kids are 8 months and acting like they are in their teens and kagome is teaching them to fight. If she never did this with shippo why would she do it with them it's just silly. Could of easily made it that she actually sealed the well until she was ready and after ten years passed in her time she returned only to find that a year had passed in the feudal era making the twins ten and more realistic. Thirdly kagome shopping happily while her kids are taken by naraku is just plain weird, that part of the story was pointless could have easily made it that she simply took rin to her time left her in her mum's care and returned to kick narakus was for hurting her pups. Sesshomaru not moving heaven and earth to protect his daughter is also unrealistic I mean he walked into the afterlife for run and risked not being able to come back now I'm not saying that he loves his pups more than rin but his instincts would of kicked in and he would of gone after kagura without a moments thought. And lastly kagome being fine with inviting sesshomaru to her bed . Now I get it was his inner demon but still letting the man who raped her casually sleep next to her and giggling about his shock is well kind of sick. Like she should be all smiles and sunshine all because it was his inner demon. This could be an amazing story, needs work on the passage of time also needs work on parental instincts kagome is a very motherly person the way she disregarded her kids safetly would never happen I know this is a fan fiction so obviously some changes of character are expected but I found the way kagome was with her kids took away from the story.

Poor kags, poor kags

What did Kagome decide to do with the jewel?