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Ah this piece made me dislike Caitlyn. Felt like slapping her and asking her if she was PMSing.

The plot progresses at a brisk pace and the story line is clean.

Based on the previous piece, Caitlyn seems a bit out of character. This particularly show in the dialogue exchange.

The dialogue is, again, contemporary in keeping with the story. However, it needs a little freshening up. Some of the conversation sounds forced or contrived. Tweaking it to keep the words young and precise will help push the story even further.

i really, really, really, really, really liked that. i could see something like this in real life. i also liked how nate would write songs but wouldnt put them on albums because they were too personal. i thought that was really sweet.

this whole story was just plain ole AMAZING. i really enjoyed it.

love, love, love, love, love,

isabel

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It was super [: I love how clueless nate is

i liked the story a lot (:

i thought caitlyn was sort of out of chaacter.. and the way you portrayed her fit more with mitchie... but in the end i liked it, a lot

aw...that was really cute. I'm glad that they worked everything out. :)

wow...that was a pretty fanfic...love it...

Hey,

Haha that was so awesome I loved it great job