Were did you hear that cheshire is french? for you were miss informed it is in fact english it is a portion of the english countryside. that is were cheshire cat gets his name

I liked it! I agree with the other reviewers on some things, like punctuation, spelling, paragraphs. But all in all it had detail and good vocabulary! I don't know why, but I read it as if it was a poem! You have wonderful potential! :)

OH WOWWWWW...sooooo good! write more lol! :D recently been obsessed with CheshireXAlice pairings...looking forward to ur other stories...

Like it? I LOVED it!

The start was kind of terrifying (so long!) but I'm a patient person so I read through it and it was worth it:3

meoooooow

paragraphs are too long, I suggest breaking them up. spelling and grammar problems, no disclaimers stating that you do not own Alice in Wonderland. but other than those minor problems, good job.

Well being my favorite pairing of all time... This was extremely fun to read. Unfortunately the first paragraph goes on forever DX Not only that, but I can tell you didn't use spell check. Don't get me wrong I can't spell either but at least use spell check. Also it was really odd how the story kept switching from first to third person... I don't know if you meant it to be like that but it was strange.

I really loved the detail, though do some research... Hentai's and most Fan Fics are way over exaggerated and real sex isn't even close to that. (In most occasions).

All in all it was pretty good and I would love to read another Alice x Che made by you! :3 Keep improving and never let people get you down.

Wow.. HORRIBLE grammar and sentence structure. Incorrect punctuation... All together, it's full of fail.

Envigorating, teasing, sensual, I loved every word of it. Long have I been a fan of the madness that ensued in Alice in Wonderland, now my deepest fantasies have been rekindled. Thank you dear Lieselotte, for your particularily prurient portrayal of our Cheshire Cat. His taunting quirks sent my mind's eye reeling at the image it made. My only suggestion is show-not-tell (descriptive writing)...yes that meticulous writing style that we learned in high school. Painting a picture with your words is the greatest gift a writer can give to their readers; so that they would implant themselves within your story becoming the character, living the action, and reveling in the feelings. Your story was truly exciting. Beautiful dialogue. Tenacious characters. Please keep up the excellent work. May the English Gods keep you literate. 3

omg i loved it! :) I really did, I would be honored if you'd read my cheshire/alice one then... :)

Thank you so much for writing this it made my day!

~Mandie

i just have to ask (did not check raiting then i began to read)you meant the cat as a cat-human, right couse otherwise it is disturping and that book are you talking about? and can you tell mewhere to get then maybe i can follow this and exept a little need of spellcheck/grama it was ok

I love this pairing, I was so excited when I saw it! But the problem is, you need to use grammar and spell check. There was a crazy amount of run on sentences! I would have liked it a lot better if I wasn't proofreading the whole story. Thanks for the read though!

Well, so here is the deal. As sick folks go, my Alice/Cheshire pairing love is totally boss... imagine my elation when I saw good old fashioned porn about them! AWESOME... so I clicked... dude, here is the thing. Those large blocks of words with no space give me headaches! and Alice, she talks TOO long sentences. But those are details. Alice and the Cheshire Cat would have made one hell of a couple... he has always striked as teh subtle (yes, subtle) master of wonderland, and Alice is just... , he is the only one that actually listens to her! and in her worst times... she listens to him!

All in all, the idea was great, development not so good, and as you are fourteen, it seems as you only really see sex through fanfics... at your age that was me all along..and i am NOT saying you should have sex... only well... do more research!