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They don't understand that gaara has that in the bag already

Great

Story's good, but I think you have tense problem...

Shadow is the bestest out if you all can't wait to read what he says next

this one is my favorite, where Sakura dies

There were gramatic errors everywhere and also problems with the past tense in your sentences. Some of them didn't even make any sense and I had to read them again to get what you were trying to say. I understand this if English is not your first language, since it is not mine either. But you should go over your fiction not only to correct this mistakes but also fix some details that you changed while writing it. One of these details is that you stated Itachi as dominant, who was competing against other dominants to mate with Naruto, then Kyuubi appeared and you made him look like Itachi's submissive after letting the reader know that Kyuubi was clearly dominant since he was possessive over Naruto as his little brother. At this point, we see Itachi and Kyuubi as 2 dominants - how can they fall in love? Then, in mating season, you put Kyuubi as dominant and Itachi as submissive after telling us that the Uchiha brothers were both dominant. You can leave it as it is if you want, is your story and I personally like that pairing very much but there was a time while reading your fiction that I got utterly confused and kind of angry since these details were incoherent and did not match each other. Much of your characters were pretty OOC but either way I liked your story, specially since I've been looking for good GAAnaru and I've been stumbling across a lot of NARUgaa and it pisses me off. XD Thank you.

Oh you should do a sequel just focusing on the kits ah that would be so CUTE! and yes I'm crazy if you wanted to know.

Yay happy ending D

MY GOD! THERE IS A YAOI-CON?! HOW DID I NOT KNOW THIS!

Thank you for the story. It was lovely. Wanna see a sequel if possible. For the kids.

Love this so far! Everything! But not one thing.-
Seriously, Sakura isn't even like that! I'm on the 14 volume of the manga and know that! Other than that, thumbs up and claps for you! Just don't have THAT hatred! Almost wanted me to push away the story and go to another one. But I wanted to see if Gaara gets the hot fox ;)
But still. I get you hate her, but you can change her and say 'I don't like the original so I made her OOC' or something like that. I'm a writer and I admit I don't like some characters in stories, but I'm not that cruel. Seriously.
Continue though! XD

It-s... to put simplly... epic, lol

poor Naruto

lololololol died of laughing