i love the perspective

Woow! Loved this point of view. Very explicit (in a good way)

:)

thats our edward!

I wrote this scene as well, in my very first fanfic. Your version put much more emphasis on the M-rated side! I thought your description was intense and well done.

Sexy, hot lovely... You should definitely write more... how about that scene where he actually hears those kittenish sighs... tasting her for the first time... when she's not dying, that would be great...

Wonderful story. I enjoyed reading your version of what was going through Edward's head at the time. Can't wait to read more of your stuff... if you have more that is.

Great Job,

Bella

That was beautiful. Your writing is so descriptive...I could almost feel Edward's arm gripping mine like a tourniquet. Wow. AWESOME! For real. The end.

That was actually really interesting and to echo what another person said I don't think I've ever seen anyone use Bella's blood as a way to arouse Edward. I would definitely be interested in reading more work from you.

I actually really liked this. It was interesting to think that actually tasting Bella's blood would be enough to arouse Edward; it's something that I've never thought of before. I liked it... it was different, in a good way. :)