I read your review and I can I say boy I agree with every shit you can you do a romance story of a certain magical index without touma as the someone like shiage or accelerator or even just that they are too many stories with touma although I have nothing against him I want to see something different
Again I love your stories

Hey! I completely agree. GO LEMON! GO VIOLENCE! Those things happen, and the authors imagination is just that, theirs. Now, I love the actual story. It was well done with few errors. Please make more! This was so so so so so good! I'm impressed with the quality and hope you can make more! You did well.

Lol i liked it but the proposal was a bit different then i remeber it from brotherhood haha XD gpod one tho :)

Good story

hell yeah ill sign

Emerald Shadow

That. Was. Fucking. Terrible.

Total awesome sauce. Put my name on that petition. Lemons live on!

Engellicka for the petition

Decent story, although it was quite hard to follow with the past and present mixing so often. Is English your second language? Some of your wording choices were unusual to be sure.

This story is hilarious, interesting, original, touching, and unique.

Erm...I just wanted to ask...r u a guy? Cause I can never imagine guys writing romantic fanfiction... AND I DON'T KNOW WHY! BTW awesome story

Beautiful story, though your grammer needs some adjusting. But other than that, good job:)

good in it's whole but you really need to keep the grammar right

in one part of the sentence it's past and in the end it's present?

that disturbs the harmony somewhat

Not bad for your FMA lemon. If you ever decide to make a second one, try to make it Alphonse/Ming(since they're also a canon coupling).