I enjoyed this. The ending wrapped up things mostly but was way too abrupt. An epilogue would make a big difference even if it was brief.

This is probably the best Ranma naruto crossover fanfic on the site, great work

I mean the last bit was very jarring, but overall this was a fantastic fic :)

That was a fun read. Thank you for writing.

Found this story by chance and greatly enjoyed it!

I can see your point that not killing his opponent can be seen as a liability, but him not being able to respond to lethal force just because he doesn't use it is just wrong. Most of his opponents have used lethal force against him at some point. He doesn't live in a world where people don't try to kill other people, they all just failed to kill him. If it was just that ninja were that good, or because he was being caught off guard that would be one thing, but lethal force isn't something that would easily kill Ranma. Poison, explosives? Similar things have been used against him before.

"JUST IN CASE THE FORMATTING DOESN'T WORK - SCENE BREAK!"

You apparently didn't bother checking to see if it worked, but since it did, please remove those lines.

author thank you for creating this nice fanfic, especially with anko in it. i never read an ranma crossover with naruto. but i enyoyed this one a lot.

Thank you !

Another problem, you say he is awesome and can beat nearly anyone is a spar yet would lose in a death match. Yet we know for a fact he 1: Did so against a demi-god in freaking canon and 2: You have Ryouga outright say he has changed greatly over the years.

You even go so far as to have him lose his unborn child and get back at the person responsible in a way that reads as being horrific despite not laying it out.

TL;DR you have backtracked multiple times, nerfed Ranma, created a situation where he should be trying to escape or destroy the village, the village is morons with no clue how to actually go about earning loyalty from an unknown despite how many years working in such a environment?

Final point of order - why is this listed as Adventure/Romance when so far 99% of the story has been Angst/Hurt? When the author can not even label their writing genre correctly it is a very bad sign to stay away. Potential readers? My advice is to leave this one alone, as he has already changed things fairly heavily according to author notes and previous reviews and yet did not do so in a way that truly fixed all these plotholes.

I will be stopping here as I do not enjoy badly written stories that end up annoying me with constant large hand waves to force the plot along a highly obvious road.

It is a flame point because you have made Ranma leave one very bad situation that he hated only to end up a SLAVE by all definitions of the word. Not sure about most but why would they read such a angst filled depressing story?

Unlike most on this site I am no longer a teenager.

thanks for the story :)

Well, you've got a decent start on digging out. Sarutobi apologizing, giving him the antidote, and telling him he wants Ranma's help digging out the sickness in the villiage is a major plus. The interrogation department that doesn't bother to simply freaking at leat start off politely and, you know, ASKING questions first before pulling out the torture tools...they need an...education as to acceptable versus non-acceptable behaviour. The search/capture teams need a bit of a beating to instruct them them if they had simply approached him and asked politely, even coming as a clearly visible group, he'd have answered their questions and avoided the mess. Maybe some psychological scars to go with the pain. The villiage council needs a taste of their own medicine, if you'll pardon the pun. Frankly, that could only help everyone in the villiage if the antidote is left up to Sarutobi.
Oddly enough, I have no issue with Ranma being trained to actually take out enemies permanently. Sometimes that's the only choice there really is on the battlefield.

I'll be honest. Being treated the way Ranma has been would have me actively plotting how to destroy the villiage. In the Narutoverse, it wouldn't actually be that hard either. The way they've treated him and the way they have already flat out stated they don't care about honor also means they are not PROTECTED by it either. There are solid reasons for the laws of war, and they only protect those who are willing to follow them. When one side acts or declares they will not follow them, and yes this includes the treatment of KNOWN CIVILIANS, that side also voids all protections of said laws. That is clear in the Geneva conventions. It's ugly, it's brutal, but so is war itself. The part about Ranma being forced to pay for the repairs resulting from his capture actually reminds me of how the nazis would bill the families of people they murdered for the cost of the bullets used to kill them. I'm rather curious as to how the frell you're going to dig this story out of this.

I'm going to make two statements: The beginning of this story was an absolute joy to read. On a technical level, cements setting, characters, plot, tone, and conflict all very nicely and sets up anticipation that the story will be a well-journeyed tale on A Fish Out of Water, so to speak.

That said, statement two is the opposite: the story dies on a technical standpoint almost entirely with chapter 6. I'll try to be succinct in my observations.

When I say the story starts grandly, I mean it. The quagmire of Ranma 1/2 is it's an endless adventure type peppered with unresolved romances. The choices made here to resolve said romances leaves a bit of sadness, but not a great deal given you opted to follow a whole new setting (in a clever way, I might add—bravo on excellent use of Ryouga's character flaw), thus minimizing the care and putting focus solely on Ranma having to deal with a nation that, punch-happy it may be, is also pretty cutthroat and ruthless. Your first chapter sets the problems (Dissolved marriage & emotional baggage, Fish Out of Water with a warrior/non-killer type in a kill-or-be-killed world, a clear ultimatum to either adapt or die, and a clash of principals & dogma), sets up two anchors to convey all to come (Ranma the non-ninja & Anko the unwilling babysitter), and gets the ball rolling at a decent clip. The subsequent chapters building on that did so at an even pace and was pretty damned good.

Then comes chapter six, where all technical writing ability is thrown out the window. I'lll be blunt: it wasn't a chapter, it was a book report on loads and loads of action scenes and dramatic scenes that the reader was not allowed to see first-hand. The cardinal sin of writing is "Show, don't tell", and that chapter very much revels in that sin. Ranma's training attempts are summarized and filed away, Ranma & Anko's relationship around one another gets summarized and filed away. Their patrol time on the borderlands, summarized and filed away. The potentially-involving and engaging topics of how a kunoichi needs to operate with sex and sexual predatory actions, summarized and filed away. First encounter of missing nins, local banditry and how it might impact trade, the village gaze of Ranma over the brief periods of his return to Konoha, and even mission fatigue & PSTD tension that is common in active field deployments in real life—summarized and filed away without a care.

Each of these topics, gauging by your own writing style, could have easily filled another three to four chapters worth of content, even touched on in a simple, but certainly more significant manner than just a summary. The issue is that once you start telling your reader the results of implied actions, you're telling them you don't really care enough to put the work down on your story. Which may not be the case (obviously is not the case—the first few chapters certainly had a lot of love & work put into them). What 'is' the case, though, is that it disconnects your readers from caring about characters they've invested in. Which is super-important if you're trying to convey an awkward romance like this scenario with Ranma & Anko. Without the time taken to get to know the characters, it all falls apart. Even the sex scene just becomes an empty plot-what-plot sex, with neither characterization of the participants shining through.

And it really was a fatal chapter, as the follow up seven and eight was little more than Ranma's strong, unyielding, boorish, bratty, petty, heart-of-gold character boiling down to "Okay Super Badass is Going to Kill/Capture All The Bad Guys & Fuck ALLLLL the Bitches, Now". And that's boring. And Anko becomes some dodgy wallflower, a polar opposite of what she starts as in the story, to say the least of what she presents as in canon. Which is also boring.

I'll contrast what other reviews are saying: your opening was insanely strong and damned competent. You sold the theme and setup for the story very well. But with chapter 6 and on, you ended up using cliff notes to write yourself into a corner and slapping a few actions scenes on to finish the work. It's pretty sad to see, given you obviously have the talent and comprehension of fundamentals of writing to see a work through to a positive benefit. This was a joy and a sadness to read. I'll keep an eye out for your future work. Thanks for the story.

I just found this. Well, I'm pretty sure I read it some years ago, but it wasn't as long then. And may I just say, it's great! You did a good job mixing Ranma's power level with the ninja's power level, so it never felt either was nerfed or godlike in comparison. Character development, romance, excitement and battles, you did it all! There wasn't alot of Ranma style humor, but that felt appropriate for this tale.

All said, a fun read. Thanks for writing, and for sharing!