This Naruto is great. He’s the villages ultimate cocksucker. The best obedient bitch you can ask. He’ll fuck his own ass to shit out moral bullshit to boost his Messiah complex. If the village abuses him, he’ll thank them with a “duuhhhh duuhhhh me good fagboy”. If you flick his wife, he’ll be grateful and forgive you with a “it’s all good, I am good boy please fuck me wife and come again”.

This pathetic piece of shit should have died squealing like a pig. He’s too stupid to live.

After pains assault, Kishi could have easily made Naruto progressively darker but instead he chose move Naruto forward in a much more dumb and simple way..

Well that was amazing I just wish there was more

Please more.
Puppy dog eyes

You're awesome :)

This is what I was looking for.
In the show, the whole resurrection thing after Pein kinda made me annoyed. Even though I was beyond glad Kakashi and the others were back to life, it still felt like it was a wasted ending. Not to mention, you’re telling me that all of a second a whole village decides to suddenly change their attitudes in like a SECOND! Kishi wanted to make Naruto a happy kid even after his misfortune. But he totally underestimated people’s grudges and made Naruto too happy-go-lucky.
Anyways, this was a realistic heartwarming fic and I loved it. I do think your writing could be a bit more polished. Nice job.

Epic

that was good keep the chapters coming

love the end

Very well written. And far more realistic. Could make for a great beginning to a new story.

Nice wish there was more

God, I love your description of Senjutsu and it’s contrast with the other ninja disciplines. Really, the only thing I wish that you would change about this is how short it is! I wish that you would have made this, as well as another one shot of yours, Only Bastards Rise, into an entire, full length story, so that I could enjoy them all the more.

Damn. I'm not sure what I was expecting when I clicked the link to read this, but it was definitely not something so elegant and moving. Good work.

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The second part and actual epilogue were great, but the first act pretty much went right up to my mental walls, located the point where the tear pipes were and BLEW IT UP WITH ATOMIC BOMBS. Real deep, soul wrecking good.