Well, my sandwich got burned. But who cares!

I think this is my favourite one of your stories by far. Peters not too cynical, Liv is prepared to call it a draw... And the snow angels, the snowball fights and the lack of dead people really made it! As well as the discussion about God... That probably was the best part for me. Its exactly what I would answer but Peter makes it sound much more intelligent. And his transition from skirts to free will of human beings was just great!

A wonderful story... I cant find any other words

Hi!

Maybe you noticed me sneaking around your fan fictions lately... Ive been trying to read most of them and though I know how necessary reviews are for every author, I didnt have the time till today. Im sorry!

I followed Piratesmileys lead here, to say the truth, and Im falling in love deeper and deeper with your stories - though, sometimes, it takes three times until I understand the metaphors. Its not that my English isnt sufficient but that I just read too fast

Nevertheless, the way you write really is unique! I really like the metaphors. Except, sometimes, you make Peter so sarcastic and ..., hm, word missing - I dont know how to call it but in those moments, I really dont like him. But in stories like this one, he just is great! Well, when isnt he

OH! Ive just noticed this story has several chapters! Wow! I really liked this one, thats why I left my dinner burning in the pan to write this review. God, it smells quite burned. Sorry, I have to run!

But Ill continue reading your fan fictions and hopefully will find some time for commenting on some others!

I love all your stories for the fact that you use so many metaphors and similies that make it more rich and comlicated but keep the image of whats happening clear to us all. This story is just amazing and shows off your writing skills, but the way you make us look at Peter and Liv shows this more as a peice of art than a story. Though i would point out some of your more complicated lines, my fvourites from this chapter are the shipper-y ones like:

"two people standing far too closely" I love this line because you show that their relationship is clear to outsiders and people who dont know them at all.

"glances to his wrists make her touch the back-pocket handcuffs in obsessive-compulsive fashion" This just made me laugh and giggle like a little school girl in the same way it did at the end of the last chapter. The heat between these to people is undeniable and look how neither actually try to deny it, they just push it to the backs of their minds.

"And considers." So Liv is actually considering wearing the skirt, eh? I really cant wait to read your next and final chapter of this, because its so unique and my own little mind is craving to see what happens.

Please update soon, its been too long already!

x

this is great! u have to add on!

I love it! I lovee their easy banter and the way Peter can soothe and challenge something within Olivia. Excellent

Yay :)

I've been gone for too long. But after I saw the monster episode, it reminded me of here and of course I had to see if you'd continued this.

Hurry up and post that last chapter!

So many great lines in this one... Assault by napping, consequences like leaves, God and free will and short skirts, and her considering... I love that she considered their banter wicked because there were no witnesses, but he did it in front of Walter, indicating a little progress just as she is seeing a progression too. I love this and will follow it...

More great description and imagery in this one. Fabulous P/O interaction and banter. You did a great job of making him adorable and untrustworthy at the same time.

Just found this piece and love it so far. The imagery is vivid and the story is very interesting. You wrote a great interaction between them.

Ah, Zaedah. I love this chapter.

You are extending the foreplay AND I LOVE IT! I doubt the show can do this well, because there we can't hear what they're thinking.

I love how the cocooned, Pattern-related case pales in comparison to their clandestined conversation about skirt vs. shave."...the rookie takes in two people standing far too closely for crime scene decorum." You betcha. Again, part of the definition of "Bolivia" is closeness. ;)

It's also cool that you made Peter speechless! Wow. He didn't say anything about "being naked." Nor could he comment on it!

"Appropriateness is hard. This is evidenced every time she looks at the object of recent musings, because what is suitable becomes most taxing." Yup, I think he's gonna wear her down by some point in Season 2.

"And since glances to his wrists make her touch the back-pocket handcuffs in obsessive-compulsive fashion" very nice :)

"Why doesn't he stop it?"

"Why didn't you wear a skirt?" *lol* Only Peter Bishop could make that seque work :)

"Remember, free will's a tricky thing. And as soon as you give up yours, I'll thank you for the shortest skirt you own. And I mean tomorrow, Agent Dunham." "Olivia pads across the dark house to a closet. And Considers." Hehe.

And my fav part:

"Not the ideal character to seek solace in, but at least he's there. possibly not in ghostly form. After much internal dispute, she's beginning to get the drift." Such a nice pun :) And you'll get her to that point LONG before the series will.

Zaedah, please keep this fic going. I love the subterfuge.

OMG!, she is going to wear a skirt! update!

Aw I love this. Can't wait for the next chapter. Its really well written too.

YAY!

I love this one so very much. :)

Your philosophical/ethical debate is absolute genius.

“Snowballs be damned. I can do what I want, mister.”

That is awesome! Yay Olivia for kicking some ass, and making Peter's point at the same time.

"...he informs while giving Peter the look their ancestral cavemen perfected. Did you get some?"

Also more GENIUS. I love that.

Please write more! I seriously want to read a reaction to a skirt... :)

And to answer your question, did I keep my sanity intact?

What sanity? (as my friends like to point out...)

Heehee.

P

*sque* ahem...sorry

THANKYOU! I love this so much! Can't wait for the next chapter!

What would it take to get you to update this within the next week? I'm almost willing to offer ;)

This story is so amazing! Your characterizations are PERFECT! I can't get enough of Peter and Olivia ;)