All I have to say is, "What a cure way to tell a story.,". I laughed, cried,and was shocked. Good job.

I like it.

Great story!

Great story

THis is really godawful. You're barely literate, you don't seem to know what actual rape is and you've made Sarah the usual petulant bitch that teenage writers always do because they don't know how to write adult conflict. Bye.

Well, okay, he put his fingers in but he didn't get to full rape. Still traumatic, but come on. How old ARE you people, fourteen?

such a wonderful story, just want to point out how Sarah constantly using profanity I understand that she was pissed of but its unbecoming to her character regardless, overall its a good read.

Crude and unpleasant. And I'm really really sick of Sarah and her attitude.

I thought this would be good, but basically it's just petulant bitchy Sarah being petulant and bitchy and ungrateful after she calls for Jareth's help yet again. Bor-ing.

This is great! I loved it! Kind of like a soap opera, but still good. :)

you have issues re: ending of chapter 4. remember to keep it safe, sane, CONSENSUAL. or at least give a warning that the story gets ugly

Phew! The way this was going I was afraid you were going to have them stayaway from each other. But you didn't and its a happy ending. YAY! I love it!

I know this review is very late compared to when you finished this story, but recently - after watching Labyrinth for the first time in a long while - I decided I "needed" to read some Labyrinth stories of Jareth and Sarah. After going through a few, I found yours and was very pleased with how it started. Good emotions, good dialogue and a refreshing plot that was completely original.

However, starting in the later chapters, I noticed how out of character Sarah was becoming. It became almost unbearable in the last two chapters, and I only finished because I felt that I had read so much already. All I can say is terrific story, sadly the ending was not in par with the rest of it. I wish that she had stayed more in character and gave a better ending; it didn't have to be sweet or even bittersweet, just an ending that was in character and not filled with expletives.

Other than that, it was well-written and mostly a joy to read. Happy writing. :)

Amazing story! You really pulled me in to the emotions and plot. Thank you!

i tried to read through this story, but Sarah's swearing and bitchy behavior is soooo off-putting. i am not a prude or anything - i swear a lot too, but goddam!