c'mon make more

That entire fight was stupid. Seriously one of the lowest points of this story. I kept expecting him to be a little bit better than what you wrote and it didn't happen. For him to remove the weights, for him to start fighting like a ninja instead of an agile samurai, for him to do something crazy like break out Guy's martial Arts... And then there was all the drama after.

Just a warning, but if this story does something as st*pid as having Naruto blame himself for something that so clearly wasn't his fault again I'm dropping this a-fcking-mediatly. I'm not down for that kind of contrived angst. I'll probably do the same depending on how you handle that transfusion mess... Don't dilute your main character by gifting his chakra to anyone else. That could be a story ender too. You won't really care, but it is what I plan to do if those things happen again. The first thing forces readers to suspend their disbelief to an unfair degree and goes against most peoples common sense. The dilution of a mc's powers is simply a bad cliche :/

Anyway, It's not good enough to make the character believe they're guilty when you didn't write the scene well enough to make US believe it too. I couldn't feel for Naruto when he started talking "hollowly" I got annoyed at the story for putting something so dumb in front of me. If anything the girl that got hurt is more to blame. I mean really, she comes from the Amazon society and was so st*pid she'd do something like jump in the middle of a duel right as smoke covers the area and blinds the combatants? Personal responsibility is a thing and she very clearly put herself in a dangerous position. Or how about the older sister, neither of them would be in this position if she hadn't pushed for a duel in the first place. Or the queen for not listening when someone called out for the match to end. Hell, even Yyou are more to blame for dragging this out for so long(And not giving a satisfactory resolution. I mean seriously, "Don't come back"? That's all you're going to give us?). The LAST person I could accept being responsible is Naruto.

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I'm going to leave the semi rant here and move on with the rest of the story. I just didn't expect to see something like this after things had been going so well for the first 28 chapters :/

I hope you do something with Batman. Feels like Naruto one ups him at everything. Maybe teach him chakra if he has any? I'm not one for seeing the mc's abilities gifted out in whatever crossover world they're in, but for this one I think I'd be ok with it.

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Hard to write?! It pretty much followed Canon the entire way through, maybe you would have an easier time writing if you actually changed something.

Ugh this is rubbish. One Rasen-Shuriken wipes him out? He needs to be caught and boosted? You know he throws the Rasen-Shuriken right? He could have stayed on the ground... The only thing he has accomplished is the totally pointless destruction of the fleeing ship. He didn't need to Odama anything either, pretty sure a normal one can wipe out mountains.

Naruto is way to passive and struggles to much with these loser aliens. Literally. I don't know if the writing was just misleading or what but it felt like Naruto was struggling with these goons. If he struggles with them how is he ever gonna handle anything else down the line? Kind of feels like its a more upbeat Batman, which is weird considering how powerful Naruto is...

Update

Soo after reading some reviews, Naruto has yet to pair with someone even after chapter 39, that is just evil to the readers who gave their pairing ideas

ur story is kind of plain, like a brick, it has nothing to push u to go for the other chapters. I was just skipping some chapters after reading chapter 1 and 2 and thought something will intrigue me butt its kind of shit, Naruto has yet to grown as a first problem compared to Canon Naruto who matured. after reading each chapter I had to go back and see the ratings for the story so I just game up and started reading the reviews. they are interesting

The last 10-15 chapters have been kinda bull stink. Training with 30 pounds? Really?! Lee was training with 300-500 pounds per leg when he was only a year and a half out of the ninja academy. Naruto can make 100 clones for over an hour. When he made Hokage, he makes 20-30 for 8 hours. That is not even him at his best. Also the Seal stops the 9 tails from leaving the narutos body so the clone thing is a big fat NO! Was a good story until that bull stink started.

Fuck... I have a feeling that your going to bring chakra into the new universe which is a baaaaaad idea. First off, look at the regular Naruto universe. Things went to shit, and just got worse, 4 great Shino I wars. Now imagine the power of chakra in the more advanced civilization of today. People wouldn’t stop and it would be chaos. The balance of powers that had been precariously kept over millions of years would be destroyed. Chaos would ensue as the world struggled to find balance once more, and as a result millions will die. But that’s just what realistically would happen, this is a story, go wild. I’m off to another fic, simply because I can’t keep track of this fic. To many paragraphs are unfinished and make no sense. To much information is missing. Good fic though.

Is The Kyuubi Male or female is Your Story?

Catwoman and batman's relationship is ducking depressing. Not a decision I'm fond of in the slightest.

Damn this story is shit.