Looks like a promising submission to an interesting challenge! I look forward to reading the rest xD

Gods this story is so sweet can't await to read more

Glad that your internet is back! And I apologize for the stretch of silence, I haven't been in the best of moods...

At least your short chapters aren't full of filler ;P I guess that since I can't go back to write critique on your earlier chapters (I wasted those comments!) that I'll start with this one.

Right away I noticed that you tend to set up each chapter from one girl's perspective. But starting out the first sentence of a new chapter with the ultra ambiguous "She" sort of threw me for a loop.

I think that you can improve your storytelling by revealing who the active narrator is before moving into the story.

For example, "She felt so ashamed."

becomes, "Tenten felt so ashamed."

The tense set up in the previous sentence was past tense, but in the second sentence you introduced a present tense word "wiping" and then switched to past tense again with "slid" and "hit".

"She wiped desperately at her eyes, but lost her balance and slid down the wall. She sat down hard and hit her head against her knees."

I revised the wording for a little more clarification, but kept the imagery intact. :D

"As she sat there, she told herself that she had been rude and the best thing to do would be to go and find Sakura and apologise."

As is generally a red flag that means your time line is getting switched around. I'm having a hard time putting this rule into words, grr cannot remember what it was ; but consider rewording the sentence with,

"She sat there and scolded herself for rudeness. 'The best thing to do would be go to Sakura and apologise.'"

This divides up the action from the internal dialogue.

"She couldn’t bring herself to chase after her though."

Here you switch to present tense again with bring and to chase. I would suggest marking a new paragraph with the beginning of this sentence or changing the words to past tense.

I'm so sorry, but I've run out of time. I'll try to finish this as soon as I can get another chance on the internet. Thanks for your willingness to hear critique!

I want to point out that you misspelled Tsunade's name a few times in this chapter. That's alright though, who doesn't make mistakes? I hope you update the fic again soon I've really enjoyed it so far.

Ha I love being right, this is good! I like the way that you work on both characters in each chapter developing more of a background. I think, that it's a good way to show contrast within their personalities. I don't want to write you a long drawn out comment unless you want one, there so needs to be more attention for the Naruto Yuri couples. To the next chapter!

W00T! I've never read a SakuTen fanfic, but already this sounds like it's going to be great :D I'd like to offer a little critique to you, if you want it.