This is simply heart breaking. :'(

Arrggghhh T_T

I hate Dino in this one !

Oh well, Great job! XD

oh so sad... TTTT but i like it! :D

i loved it!

i really hope there's a sequel... XD

but i must say that i liked how you made the ending.

it just showed how pure hibari's feelings were for dino

*and 'cus i'm a sucker for angst XDD*

I took so long because my life ate me alive and I completely forgot about this. Your PM is probably buried in my inbox, sorry about that. A friend of my pointed me to this today. I originally wasn't going to bother, but I just wanted to make things clear. So here you go.

It isn't the fact that the basic premise is the same that I'm saying that you plagiarised me. Dino marrying and leaving Hibari isn't an original idea in any case. It's in the details. Let's see... Roses, check. /Blue/ roses, check. Roses each year, check. Dino's announcement of marriage, check (almost the exact same words, if not the same tone). Dino getting married exactly six months later after the first announcement, check. It's just too many similar ideas for me to be able to swallow the whole 'coincidence' thing.

Also, you just shot yourself in the foot, actually. That fic that your friend told you about? Is also mine. It's called 'Learned Hopelessness', and it's my rewrite of the whole 'Dino gets married' premise because I was really unhappy about how I had dealt with the premise. I don't need to tell you how you just invalidated your whole argument, right? /sighs

In any case, if you want to take down the story, do so. If you don't want to, don't do it. I don't really care at this point. I just want to make my viewpoint clear here. (And no, my review previously wasn't angry. I was more amused than anything, and horrified that you had chosen Icarus of all things to plagarise.)

I'm glad that you said that you're working on Hibari's characterisation. But your Dino is off as well. As the friend who diverted me to them said, "You can replace their names and it still works." That is a very, very bad thing. Then it ceases being D18 and being an original fic with just their names. And no, just because Hibari is in love doesn't mean he'll be OOC. It's possible to write him IC and in love. I've seen it done well. I've done it myself as well (though, in my typical fail-fashion, I took 120k words and a coauthor to do it). Please don't give excuses like that. It just makes you look worse.

Language-wise, mm, it's decent. Better than a lot of stuff I've seen on FFN, really, but I've definitely seen better. But that doesn't say much really, because most things are like that.

Ah well. I don't really care anymore. I'll just treat this as free publicity or something. I'm honestly am not angry about the whole thing, just really bemused.

/goes back to work

i've never read icarus before...

but i bet it can't be better than this

:D

wow! this story is amazing. i mean, hibari is ooc, but the incredible language more than makes up for it

good job!

woah. the story felt so real. good job.

i'm sorry for ranting at you ];

i must have sounded really mean and.. er.

i thought it was good writing, just got dalknaldmda at the similarity _

*pats Jello in the back*

the plot of Dino getting married and everything is umm expected and much thought of by D18 fans) as long as your conscience is clear~ it's a nice plot)

(i havent read The Tragedy of Icarus before either, and still havent.)

:P I deleted a bunch from this review cos I realized I was ranting. Haha.

But hey, don't beat yourself over it. If you've never read it before (I'VE never read ... whatever book that is), then it's an honest mistake based on advice given by a friend and your own thoughts. Contrary to popular belief, it is possible for two people (out of like, the billions in the world) to think up the same idea for a one-shot. If your fic was more of a ... novella, or longer piece of work that seemed very close to someone else's work, then it'd be a little iffy there. :0

Hibari's out-of-character because he's in love. IMO, if Hibari was 'in-character,' I believe he'd just beat the crap out of Dino the first chance he gets, just to prove he can beat him. :P

Don't give up on writing~! :D

D'aw ;_; /Angstyy/ :K Maybe Hibari should go kidnap him, ha ha ha.

this is almost completely the same as "The Tragedy of Icarus..."

you could have at least said something about it.

and hibari seems really OOC... but dino seems good w

i think the poetry-letter part was pretty, too.

I think someone has pointed it out to you, but it might sound better coming from the author of Icarus herself.

... You know. If you're going to take details from Icarus, you could have been, I don't know, a little more subtle about it? The blue roses (even the colour!), six months between the announcement and the wedding, roses on every birthday. Wao.

And... make Hibari less OOC? This is a complete, utter butchering of his character so much that I don't know where to even BEGIN, seriously. Just. I don't know what to say anymore. Dino, too, even though it's less bad on that front because Dino is... Dino is an easier character to write, generally.

(PS: Icarus is really my worst fic I've written for KHR. Why did you choose THAT one of all pieces. I'm still ashamed of it, a. /kills it with fire)

OMG! I love it so much!

But the drama, especially when it's D18 drama! Oh god... it's too much for my itty bitty heart to handle... poor Kyou-chan TT_TT

But anyway, great work! XD