EEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKKK! WHY DO YOU HAVE TO STILL BE BREATHING WILL!? Jacks so much better for her.

Kudos

Ah, such a beauty fic! You capture the tension so perfectly. I wish this had been in the movie. :)

This was really good. I liked it a lot. :)

Another beautiful fic. Since I'm short on recently right now, I'm hitting all your one-shots whenever I can, but when I get enough time, I want to make my way through your longer pieces.

Anywho, love this, beautifully done, as I said. You have such a knack for these characters! I am so glad that, in the absence of real Sparrabeth in the movies, there are your fics to keep me thoroughly entertained :)

~Ultra~

wow. I absolutely LOVED it.

THIS is the scene I would've LOVED to be in the movie!

bravo.

WOW that was pretty cool :D :D Good job :D

Okay, see, the problem with your writing is that every time I think I've completely flipped out and left you the most fan-girl, groupie-ish review of all times, you pull out something like this and I have to go to my thesaurus to look up new words for "Brilliant beyond brilliant" "sublime" "perfection" "so good there are no words in the english language to encompass it" and so on.

Okay, now I've had a glass of wine and calmed down. This is absolutely, utterly, 100% the scene I've been waiting to read since I first saw AWE and had my heart ripped out by Ted and Terry's horrible lack of closure for Jack and Elizabeth. THIS is the answer to all my hatred of AWE. THIS is EXACTLY what happened in that realm where the movie is real and what we don't see on screen happened elsewhere. THIS IS IT. Literally, I feel like all my frustration over the total lack of consistency between Jack and Elizabeth's characters in the third film has suddenly, magically, been resolved. This scene did it.

The most beautiful, the most poignant, the most gut-wrenching, the most true-to-character, the most realistic, the most fantastic, the most believable, the most epic, the most profound scene that could EVER HAVE BEEN WRITTEN between these two characters. It blends SEAMLESSLY with the films... it provides that bit of sparkle and shine that was missing from AWE!

I literally would have to quote the whole thing on here to tell you which bits I loved best.

"It would pass, and she would feel better on the next day, because the next day – each next day - would be taking her further away from what had happened, from what was happening now... "

the rhetoric here is so strong, so poetic, and so sweeping- you can feel the rise and flow of her thoughts, the tension and resolution, and the confusion.

"Jack was found, all hope was lost, and she was not the girl she once was anymore."

so, so powerful... "all hope was lost,"- such a powerful reminder that there is no right answer to this puzzle anymore.

"He stood just a step away from her, one hand on the railing, his eyes fixed on her, darker than her soul on the first dreamless night after."

You've just taken this to a whole new level- their relationship is instantly so complex, such a tangled web of various emotions, desires... it doesn't need to be simple, it speaks for itself. Beautiful.

"Something was lost and she could see it. There was no curiosity in his eyes now. Only speculation."

Oh my god you quite literally broke my heart with this. I actually cried out "No!" to my empty apartment. I swear I am not a total geek, I do have a life, your writing is just THAT GOOD.

""You should. Whatever for?"

I could actually HEAR him saying that. His sharpness- it is just so compelling. There is no simple solution, no easy way to forgive her, no easy way for her to make him understand her heart- it's all a disaster, and they both know it. And yet, somehow, they are able to communicate beyond the situation. Your ability to weave these layers of conversation is extraordinary.

"Oh, you don't want me to forgive you, Lizzie. You really don't," he said levelly.""

The way you write Jack's madness... it's just heartbreakingly true. He seems off balance, and yet he is himself. And this line- that she doesn't want him to forgive her- it just paints so much depth into their interaction. So much passion and so many futures they could take.

"You shouldn't do anything courageous again," she said through clenched teeth. "Not for me," she added, absently digging her nails in his coat.""

See- that's precisely what makes this fit so perfectly- much more perfectly than even the film writers could have done- into the story. Draw backs to past, present, and future. The fact that we, as the readers, know he WILL do something courageous for her again, makes this all the more chilling.

""he took a step back, then a step forward, and then let go of her hand, turned around, walked a few steps away, paused, and whirled around fixing his gaze at her.""

The way you've captured Jack's uncertainty- his vulnerability- and yet his need to decide in his heart who she really is to him- it's all epic in a way I can't quite describe. It's like you've created a reality here that is so much more real than most expressions of life I see around me on a daily basis. The contradictions, the questions of their interaction- it is such a beautiful, subtle reflection of our worst fears and most precious dreams in life.

"for a moment she felt that she was herself again, for a moment she thought she knew herself, and all that strange unpredictability that had frightened her was gone."

I think with this scene, I finally understand the map of story again... I understand where this was all heading, how inevitable it is that Jack and Elizabeth find each other on the sea one day. CLOSURE. BLESSED CLOSURE. You've realized that livejournal challenge with epic greatness, my dear. CONGRATULATIONS! XOXOXOXO

wow. just, wow

Beautiful.

xLina :)

I is confused :P what did she not know?O.O i wanna know...:)

This is so beautiful. Your vocabulary, grammar, writing style... EVERYTHING... it's all perfect! You really have been an inspiration for all Sparrabethers- for me, definitely. I think your Vulnerant Omnes, Ultima Necat was one of the first Sparrabeth fics I read back in April. I was on the way to New York, then, and I swear, I couldn't look away from my screen. Probably one of the best J/E fic out there. With C overtly, you barely surprise me- you really do have a way with words, Florencia!

Do keep writing!

MsAurora

Actually I'd prefer it if you didn't live without posting once a week! But if you must...this was a lovely snippet for some closure. I don't see how it's possible that not everyone believes in this pair. They should read ur stuff. Then they'd be convinced LOL

Ooh...pretty. :)

-Zay

wow it was very good!both elizabeth and jack were 100% in character!well done!:)