Idk what I just read, but it was amazing xd
I love this, I didn't understand, but I like it(?
(Sorry, idk speak english)

Loved Blue and I love this story too. So beautifully written. I can't wait for more. Both you and Taranova are great writers :)

Woah...epic with a side helping of awesome sause. :D

~*~ Miku Tsukino ~*~

You're frickin' amazing! I like Elricest but an act such as the one described started to bring tears to my eyes. You're a brilliant writer.

~*~ Miku Tsukino ~*~

Wow. Just...wow. This is such an amazing fic...You've got that special gift that lets you shove emotion through mere words and bring everything to life. Your distaste for elricest really shows through your descriptions and (especially combined with my own hate for things like that) really adds a whole 'nother dimension to the sheer horror of this story. Your ability to twist words into such poetic phrases and imagery is inspiring. I hope you find the words to continue this story. I'm sure that it will be well worth the wait when you finally do. :)

I love this story. Every chapter is like a new discovery when it comes to each character. I hope to see more of this.

awww, Al died. :(

i am so glad you decided to continue this! *leaps for joy* it is a very good chapter, and i dont think the ending is bad. as for the hidden messages i am at a loss (i've never been good on those .'). i suppose i'll have to wait for them to be reviled. lol

Okay, so first and foremost: the messages! Coming from me they probably don't count, because I helped you edit this. Even so! Onto them.

-Misery is Forever

-He Failed

-I know the spotted panthers and green lion and the peacock's feather thing have to do with alchemy, and they're also on the FMA DVD's and outline some of the commercial items with it. XD I think the Latin version might be inscribed on human transmutation circles as well.

And that's all I could find. ( Sorry, I know I must fail both as a friend and a literary analyzer...person XDD

On to the review!

First thing I'd like to compliment you on is the symbolism in this chapter. There's so damn much of it. XD For example, the angels in the architecture - maybe it's just me, but I felt like you were drawing parallels to Ed and Al, and any other "innocent" souls caught up in the tragedy of Mizer. Al was first compared to Michael or Gabriel (archangels), and then later you made it clear that the angels in the architecture were trapped and helpless (as Ed and Al were in captivity). Also, there were small italicized phrases in the scene that suggested parallels to Roy's own war-ridden past and his crimes pertaining to it. Lovely.

The fly. I loved the fly. XD I think it was a fly? I don't remember. A nice symbol of insignificance, helplessness, and of course death. Poor Roy. I like how it was brought up again later on, with particular emphasis on the centered line.

Roy in the mirror - great. Not exactly a symbol, but a nice device there. The way you phrased it just made me all too happy inside! It was lovely. When I first read it I really did think Roy was talking to someone, with all of the reflection's "responses" to Roy's story about the little girl he killed. XD Fooled me.

Okay, now that I've taken care of that, because I really wanted to mention those particular symbols, I'm reading again. I'm going scene by scene here so I don't leave anything out, I promised a long review and that's what you're getting goddamn it!

"Rainbow in the sky above." Haha, you repeat this later. XD Clever XD

"Bright stars danced in his mind, swirling around the black haze of a demonic ash no priest could ever rid him of." Poor Ed, feeling all shitty and guilty. ( -huggles Edo-

By the way, I just looked up something interesting on Peacock feathers. Apparently they symbolize nobility and immortality. I found this quite interesting. XD Oh and I just found this site interesting in general, when you have time you should totally look at it:

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The first one explains the phases of alchemy, and the second has the entire recapitulation. Why do I get the feeling Arakawa did a lot of studying on nerdy sites like this? LMAO

"His hands hurt." You repeat this too! Great motif, if you can call it that. Emphasizes the physical element of pain, but shows that most of his pain comes INTERNALLY - he's in psychological turmoil, and only slightly acknowledges what he's done to himself.

By the way, did "ashen" face mean anything? I know, I know, I'm reading a lot into this story, but that's what I do. XD AP Lit teaches you to find meaning where there is nothing but words. It's just that ashen can be a religious reference in some cases.

Moving on to Roy!

Ooh, nice description of the girl in the fire. Graphic, though I'm going to have to criticize a little something here. The descriptions themselves were great but they didn't sound natural to me, at least not from a speaker. For example: people talking generally don't use adjectives. "Tiny chest" would be better replaced with just "chest". People also tend to not use similes. "Dripping down her teddy bear like paint." Paint? There's no reason for him to say that, and it sounds like the writer is forcing words in his mouth. Idk, just my thoughts ) Still creepy. Fucking creepy.

Oh, another note on that. People generally don't melt when they're burning, though it depends on the temperature.

-Extreme heat will melt a person, so long as it doesn't first cause the person to combust.

-Boiling water will give a person third degree boils that eventually burn through the skin and muscle tissue (the skin doesn't generally turn black) and sometimes the flesh "flakes"

-Dry burning typically just causes a person to have a severe, possibly third degree "sunburn" which lasts a few seconds, followed by intense bleeding and finally "black" burning, if it's simply close proximity to fire (think charcoal)

-If the person themselves are ON fire, the charcoal effect takes place immediately.

Part of the melting actually takes place with the fat tissue, not the skin tissue itself. Wow, that's the weirdest educational speech I've ever given. It's a thicker melting than paint, anyway. XD

HAHAHA, I'm going to hell for this but that "I had a dream" thing made me think Roy had gone Martin-Luther-King on us. XDD

"white linoleum, white walls, white porcelain" - a symbol for purity I'm guessing?

"Beyond those five senses, stretching to a rare sixth, Death found his soul, that intangible myth that made a human so valuable, so easy to destroy." LOVE this line.

"Immaculate was the world of his dreams, a world free of the black burns of death and decay." I don't think that word means what you think it means. No, sorry XD Princess Bride kick. You used it right. HAHAHAHA

Oh, real quick before I forget. There's a secret message here, which is fine, but at some points it feels like you're just sort of rambling philosophy (GOOD philosophy, but sometimes there doesn't really seem to be a structure or point to it.)

Regret? No.

Regret? Yes.

Awesome? Yes.

Awesome? N- JK XD

"It screamed at him...the black phone was relentless in its attempts, as it kept crying out its wailing plea. The dead couldn't talk - no lips, no tongue, no teeth." Huh. It's like the phone is symbolizing the dead now. And earlier you said something about him not being able to voice his thoughts to the dead but the dead being able to affect him. INTERESTING. OOH, and right after that you use the line to show Roy is having trouble speaking. SWEET.

"You may be hard-headed, but that can only stop a bullet so much." O I C WHAT U DID THAR HUGHES.

Haha! Wow! The imagery of the sky outside (I assume Ed was watching out the window or something) matches that alchemy symbolism perfectly. lmao

"The devil had touched his flesh." Devil's whisper. Poor Roy-sama. I'm going to quote you from your Blue review. Satan's not playing nice. (

Okay, one thing I don't get about the priest scene that I didn't get earlier. I get why Roy's being all reverential and everything, but I don't know why he'd call the priest Father...out of respect? Is this a Catholic church? I don't remember lMAO.

D'aaaw, the bastard left just when Roy was trusting him for an answer. NEVER TRUST A CATHOLIC PRIEST ROY, I BET HE LEFT TO GO RAPE ED.

Hmm, do the clock hands symbolize something as well I wonder? At the beginning of this scene they were apart, "fighting", and then at the end they're together. What could that mean I wonder? Time seems to be relevant in this fic, I should pay attention to that more.

Poor Ed, wanting to get married. ( WINRY IS A HO.

Okay, I'm going to have to speed this up a bit because I'm running out of characters. Haha

Funeral is sad. ( Oh, a little mistake here. You said "thicked-armed men" and thicked is not a word. Thick is. LMAO.

Small doses. Like a poison. Hmm.

Ooh, we're learning more about these guys and why they did what they did. So they experimented on civilians? Grr. I wonder what their goal is? Throughout all of this I haven't been sure. How does Devil's Whisper work? Why have the Ishbalans and the Xingians teamed up? Towards what goal are they working?

MUahahaha! Ed was a hell hound. Good little doggy! -evil grin- Wish you would've been able to get away though. (

Hohohoho. That tape. -Shudder- Poor Al. Damn. That makes me sad. And also creeped out. I kind of feel like shooting someone. Preferably the bastard that raped him. Okay, one thing about Al that I just have to say. I don't think Roy should be pissed at Ed for "raping" Al. Yes he violated him against his will, and Elricest creeps me the fuck out in general, but here's the thing. They would have DIED otherwise. And in case they didn't notice, Ed was raped too. Come on. They're not going to be so blinded by Al's innocence that they're going to say, "FUCK YOU ED YOU BROTHER FUCKING FUCKER." Haha, that made me lol. The phrase. ANYWAY.

...OF COURSE ED KNOWS AL'S DEAD. SPEAKING OF WHICH YOU MOTHERFUCKING PRICKS, WHY DON'T YOU GO CHECK ON THE KID? HE'S GOING INSANE AND MUMBLING ABOUT PEACOCKS IN A HOSPITAL BED. Get him some fucking chocolate, a bunch of hugs, and for God's sake! Why didn't they let him go to Al's funeral! That's cruel. That's cruel and unusual. They need to tell him, somehow. Get him some fucking drugs and help him out.

HO SHIT, THE FUHRER'S DEAD. What the hell's gonna happen now? Plot twist. XD

Anyway, I have 890 characters left. What to say, what to say. This was awesome, you're an awesome writer, there wasn't much wrong with it that I could see, no major errors. And I don't know what the fuck you're talking about when it comes to errors - I saw absolutely none. None at all. Maybe I just haven't read Mizer in a while, but there really wasn't much there to contradict any earlier plot points or inconsistencies. Could you perhaps point them out to me?

...Still more characters. Okay. You need to update soon! And not in a year, like this time. ;-; I want to see what happens to Ed, and Roy, and whether any of them recover or if they're all going to just kill themselves or each other or what. This story is MISERABLE to read. Every time I do read it I feel like crying, because it's so goddamn depressing. I guess that mea

misery is forever

he failed

only two secret messages I saw

he failed

I am a bit confuse, but I guess I can wait and see what happens.

Hmm, at first I thought Hakuro was referring to Edward that has killed himself, and I was like "Oh no!" Then it was just King Bradley and I was like "Oh good." LOL XD

"His Hand Hurt." Now that I have heard the fuhrer has pass, is it Kind Bradley who was going on that rampage? Because I swear I kept thinking Edward was hurting himself in so many ways.

I am a confuse duckie :P

Well, it was so nice that you have FINALLY come back and update! I wasn't expecting an update for a while actually. I honestly thought you were going to say "Fuck it!" and delet the fic and go on with your life. Then Stefie will be so sad because she won't have anything to get her mind off the fact that Ed and Winry hitch and had kids BLEH DX

I need to thank Tara for kicking your ass around a bit, she save this fic! Hooray For Tara ASS WHOOPING! LOL

Please update again, as I do not want to wait forever to see what has happen and see if the country will go into ruins!

Bye Bye :D

thankyoou 4 the update, great chapter

ooo poor alphonse! D: i couldnt find any secret meanings so i fail :/ please continue :D

Erk, why must there be such confusion...*whines* Aw well, it was a great chapter update! Still a tad freaked out over the whole thing, but definitely a good update. I so need to clean my inbox out. :( God, what happened to Ed and Al just makes me want to cringe. Sadly, I didn't really catch the hidden messages. xD Not as mentally sharp as I used to be. x_x Sorry I've been a little behind on reading. Been having several family crises one after another. I'm really happy to see an update from you, even if it is one really dark chapter!

Very good please update soon