I am sorry you did not finish it. It is interesting. Well, for starters, you could do Edward and HArry becoming friends and then briefly dating before Bella swan comes in. Then you could complicate things between them like Eddy boy goes for Bella and left Harry. you could do the imprint thing if you like or only friends with Jacob and the others. Bella could be a bitch or only a shy, sweet girl. There are a lot of possibilitiesibilities.

I really like this. I wish you would update soon.

I can see this story would be great, but I notice there is only one more chapter written. I hope you will start writing again soon.

Great start. I love Sirius and Harry living together and with Remus just makes it better.

Please continue!

I luv it! More!

great story even if it was a little short and not finish, i still love reading it

why is harry rude to everyone but the underdog? kinda weird.

Hey! It's me again!

This review will be slightly less monstrous.

Hm, let's see... everything I said in the other review still counts, of course. Careful on being too detail-heavy. You might also want to consider skipping travel scenes, unless something important happens in them. It's more interesting if you jump from event to event. For example, I think Twilight started right off with Bella meeting her dad for the first time in forever, right? That was her first conflict. Harry didn't really have a conflict in the first couple chapters, until he met Edward.

And I stand by my own rule of inserting details of past events, or 'back story' into the fic as you go, instead of dumping it on us right in the beginning. I don't know if you've read LDBP, but I do this throughout a scene with Hermione. Little tidbits as the scene progresses, instead of giant paragraphs of explanations.

My personal number one rule: Show, don't tell. Let the readers draw their own conclusions from the interactions of the characters in the story, instead of 'telling' them. I had a lot of trouble with this a year ago. My new and old BS fics are evidence of that. The old one had a lot of stuff where I just 'told' the readers how things were, instead of 'showing' it. And there's always room for improvement. :P Not everyone has an awesome muse like I do! *strikes a Gai Pose* XD

I'm looking forward to seeing what kinds of twists you throw on this common hp/twi xover.

Mirage

Good story. I like how you put Jenny in there as the one who shows Harry around the school. I think I'm going to really like that character! Update soon please!

I really like this story.U really,really need to write somemore to it.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! (please)

Like the story so far, please update

Loving it _ Please update soon.

love