In the last chapter you said right side of the chest.

Choked by a giant finger wearing a black cloak or A black cloaked figure was Choking Ally?

When I first started teaching here not teacher here. Great story so far.

Bet that goes down well. The question is, whose lecture will be longer: Hermione's or Mrs Weasley's?

So, Hermione is intelligent and highly logical. Why in the everloving fuck are writing her as the most illogical character I have ever seen?

Ummm... molly? You choose molly? I would understand lily, but molly? Weird choice.

I tried to ignore the badness... it didn’t only is the spelling bad it feels like it was written by a 5 yr old trying to write what mommy, daddy, and daddy’s girlfriend do at night. GARBAGE.

Moody's line halfway through the chapter is the best!

Turns me off when people can’t write properly or don’t get a beta...

There's a fix for bad spelling. It's called the Oxford English dictionary

"Love could concur all".Jesus, doesn't anybody buy a dictionary anymore

Hermione keeps whining about there being no notice does she think a death eaters going to send her a letter : dear mudblood, tomorrow I'm going to attack you

OK... this is great! your use of different characters, WOW and GENIUS might I add. I loved all the funny parts especially when Ginny's bum went numb for the first time! I LAUGHED! Really looking forward to reading Tears of the Phoenix :)

i have just 1 reply after viewing the relationship between harry and ally:-
legally its questionable
morally its disgusting
personally i like it

Really need scene breaks or something, or at least not to use pronouns when you’re changing viewpoint characters. I thought Ron and Daphne had landed in the mud until I got to the next paragraph and realized it was a scene between Harry and Abby.